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The Raincoat MAG

November 12, 2014
By Epsilon PLATINUM, Eureka, California
Epsilon PLATINUM, Eureka, California
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Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep, but I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep, and miles to go before I sleep."

Her dad had given her the raincoat. It was green on the outside and had an army camouflage pattern on the inside. He said it had been his, but now it was for her. Right now it was tied by the arms between two white pines, doing a bad job of keeping off the rain.

Tracey had made camp with the things she brought from the house – two blankets to cover the ground, a Capri Sun to drink, a comic to read, and the raincoat as a roof – but she wished she’d had time to bring more. The blankets were cold and wet, and the wind kept blowing the rain in under the coat. The Capri Sun was almost empty, and soon she would have to start foraging to survive. She remembered what Dad had told her – she could eat wintergreen berries and chew their leaves, crush acorns into flour, and eat huckleberries when they were in season. But right now it was late fall, and everything was all shriveled up and dead.

Tracey thought longingly of her soft, warm bed, of her stuffed rabbit Jemima, and the orange cat, Samson, who sometimes curled up next to her pillow. Maybe if she just went back and said sorry, Mom would say it was all right and make her hot cocoa and pancakes like she used to when she was little and they fought.

But she couldn’t. She didn’t want Mom’s pancakes. She’d rather live the rest of her life as a savage in the woods eating acorns than go back and beg for Mom to let her in. Mom hated Dad, and now Dad was gone because of her.

Tracey didn’t care what Mom said Dad had done, why she kicked him out, because Mom was a liar. Dad had told her so last month when they were camping. He had said, “Tracey, your mother is going to tell you some very mean things about me, but I want you to remember that they’re not true. Your mother is a liar.”

The wind was blowing hard now, and the raincoat wasn’t helping at all. Tracey’s hands were numb, and she couldn’t stop shivering. She tried to read the comic, but the pages had gotten damp, and the words were all bleeding together.

Far away, she could hear her mom calling her name. “Traaayyy-seeee! Baby, where are you?”

Tracey covered her ears, and then uncovered them. Mom’s voice was a bit closer now.

“Honey, I’m so sorry. Please come back inside.”

Tracey felt her eyes begin to water and shivered. She started tearing little pieces off of the comic. Then, before she could stop herself, she was bawling, “Mommy, I’m here! I’m here!”

The raincoat fell to the ground as Tracey jumped up and started running back toward the house, and the brambles grew over it.

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on Apr. 16 2015 at 7:57 pm
crazysockmonkeys SILVER, Boynton Beach, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"I think of writing as something more organic than words, something closer to being than action." -Tennessee Williams

You use beautiful prose, and I love the way you describe Tracey's little tent and the things inside of it. Wonderful job!