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911 Alert

March 8, 2012
By tangtay GOLD, Albuquerque, New Mexico
tangtay GOLD, Albuquerque, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
Our street corners keep secrets, and our road signs only suggest, never deciding for us, never knowing if the destination to which they lead is where we truly belong. ~Alex Gaskarth

“Mother!” I heard her cry as she opened her room only to see her mom on her bedroom floor with a box of chocolates. Her mother tried to respond to her furious daughter, but her mouth was overflowed with her chocolates. HER chocolates that HER boyfriend gave to HER for Valentine’s Day. How dare her mother take what was not hers! How dare her mother not even ask before taking.

She was speechless with rage. It wasn’t just the chocolate that she was upset about. Her anger also had to do with her mother going completely against what she had taught her since she was a little girl. Also, her mother trespassed into not only her “most sacred” teenage room, but also through her “most private” teenage stuff.

With all this thinking, she finally screamed, “That’s stealing!” I could tell that she thought to herself that she could say so much more, but instead, she decided to sum up all her frustrations into one statement. Turning to face me, she declared, “I may just have to turn her into the police.” I laughed. She stayed straight-faced. I stopped laughing. She stormed out of her room. Her mother remained motionless on the floor, still stuffed with chocolates throughout the entire incident.

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on Jul. 12 2013 at 4:14 am
Pamplemousse SILVER, Gilbert, Arizona
7 articles 1 photo 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To be happy, Don't do whatever you like, Like whatever you do" -James Barrie (author of Peter Pan)

I agree with Silver Sun in that this piece needs work. It seems like this would do better as a short story/essay or a poem but not a script or play at all. Perhaps if you want to write it as a play, consider adapting the basic story into the format of a script (google it if you aren't sure how to write a script). Interesting concept though! I hope you revise it and I can't wait to see what you come up with.

on Apr. 30 2012 at 10:41 am
_ella_herondale BRONZE, San Diego, California
4 articles 2 photos 222 comments

Favorite Quote:
"...If the Thames that ran beside them...recalled a night where the moon shone as brightly as a shilling on the same boy and girl... and thought to themselves, 'at last, the wheel comes full circle,' they kept their silence."

Interesting. The tenses were confusing, and it was a bit short. This would be even better if you looked over what you wrote. Good job anyways though, it was still quite interesting.