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Shattered Peace

February 19, 2013
By Rebel21 PLATINUM, St. Catharines, Other
Rebel21 PLATINUM, St. Catharines, Other
20 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
Where there is desire, there is gonna be a flame,
Where there is a flame someone's bound to get burned.
Just because it burns doesn't mean you're gonna die,
You've got to get up and try.


Chapter 1

Ba boom.
Ba boom.
Ba Bo-- ...
White light.
White space.
Gentle figures in distance. Faces appear.
Peace. Serenity.
I stand upright without flexing a muscle. Ultimate peace.

"Follow us."

I follow the innocent- looking figures.
Time feels slow. Time is gracious.
Gentle lights appear in the distance. So far in the distance.
I glance at my feet.
They are still yet I am moving.
A white flowing dress tumbles from my shoulders to my toes.
Still moving, pure- white angel eagle wings gracefully keep me afloat the ground.
Peace.
Amazing peace.
I shall never leave this peace.

Dark figure.
Peace begins to shatter, and stop altogether.
The dark figure stands out upon this painting of purity and peace and staggers towards me.
I begin to run. I need the sentimental peace back, I need it.
My mind dazed, I move no faster than I have been previously.
Flick my head around,
flash of a black face and fiery eyes that almost pierce mine, close eyes.
In the same moment, I gasp fiercely and shoot my eyes open to the inside of a hospital room.


The author's comments:
This is the 1st chapter of my paranormal novel, I've always been curious about the after life and love making it up as I go along because we will never know who is right, so why not be wrong?

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Beef. PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 5 2013 at 12:01 am
Beef. PLATINUM, Kenmore, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Does my sexiness upset you?
Does it come as a surprise
That I dance like I've got diamonds
At the meeting of my thighs?
- Maya Angelou, Still I Rise

Nothing ends
Nothing ever ends
- Dr. Manhattan, Watchmen

Well thank you very much for taking the time to read my stuff. I will always read stuff from people who comment.

on Mar. 4 2013 at 4:46 pm
Rebel21 PLATINUM, St. Catharines, Other
20 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
Where there is desire, there is gonna be a flame,
Where there is a flame someone's bound to get burned.
Just because it burns doesn't mean you're gonna die,
You've got to get up and try.

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Beef. PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 4 2013 at 3:04 am
Beef. PLATINUM, Kenmore, Washington
29 articles 0 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
Does my sexiness upset you?
Does it come as a surprise
That I dance like I've got diamonds
At the meeting of my thighs?
- Maya Angelou, Still I Rise

Nothing ends
Nothing ever ends
- Dr. Manhattan, Watchmen

I dig how you started this. I also like the topic. Exploration into the dead.