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April 9, 2009
By CrazyBaby GOLD, Portage, Michigan
CrazyBaby GOLD, Portage, Michigan
17 articles 2 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"a persons a person no matter how small" - doctor suess

Feel my pain,
Hear my screams,
watch me die and see me leave
with out a word,
with out a sound.
into the cold ,
unforgiving ground
you heard my heart,
as it stopped beating,
now that the life i had,
is slowly retreating
now i dont know,
what to do,
now that youve,
ended my life with you,
in this grave,
i wait and watch,
grasping the life i had,
by a notch

The author's comments:
i wrote this awhile ago

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This article has 3 comments.

Lonleydandy said...
on Jan. 17 2010 at 3:22 pm
I actually have to differ with "Torsten O." because I did like it. I don't mind the length of the lines, as long as the content is good. Peronally, I think the breaks make it flow better than having no breaks at all. Great job :D

on Apr. 26 2009 at 5:42 pm
Torsten Odland SILVER, Warrington, Pennsylvania
8 articles 0 photos 4 comments
I really really like this. the line breaks are a little frantic at times, but the last three lines are excellent (although I don't think I would have put the comma after had).

on Apr. 25 2009 at 8:14 pm
tragicxharmony SILVER, Vicksburg, Michigan
9 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am waiting; I am wanting; no more fighting; no more bleeding. <3

hi allie i really like this one