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Already Gone

May 19, 2009
By BrittanyB SILVER, Vass, North Carolina
BrittanyB SILVER, Vass, North Carolina
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Standing there, watching him in line
Waiting patiently to get on the plane
There he stands tall and proud
With his boots on, his big bag weighing him down
His shirt carefully tucked in

His head slowly turns
The line slowly moves on step closer
He looks at me, his only daughter
As a tear fills my eyes, my face bright red
There daddy stands, tall and proud

Still looking at me
A tear rolls down his cheek
Violently hitting the ground and shatters
Mommy can no longer hold onto my hand
I run towards daddy as he steps one step closer

With tears burning my eyes
I’m screaming inside
I trip and fall and I scrape my knee
I jump up my face still red
I run towards daddy faster

I jump on him with a flying hug
Tightly holding onto his neck
Begging him “Don’t go daddy! Please don’t go!!”
His face redder than my own
Bullets of tears fall from his face

Screaming until t hey reach their destination
Shattering onto the ground
Daddy kisses my cheek
I continue to sob
I rest my head onto his shoulder

As he cradles me in his arms
I sill sob, my eyes growing heavy
Daddy slowly and gently takes me back
Back to mommy, as she wraps her arms around us both
She carefully grabs me, holding me close

My eyes halfway open
I watch daddy march back to place
Right before he left me in mommy’s arms
He whispered “I love you hunnie, don’t forget that”
One more tear rolls down my face

Soaking mommy’s shirt
Daddy turns around, blows me a kiss
And with the blink of my eye
He is already gone

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This article has 9 comments.

on Jun. 23 2009 at 6:29 pm
LoveLikeWoe DIAMOND, LeSueur, MN, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
Whoever laughs first has the sickest mind.

okay i'm crying this poem is so sad! But it was very beautiful.

on May. 26 2009 at 4:34 pm
BrittanyB SILVER, Vass, North Carolina
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Thank you all for the comments and the support!!

I know that I've gone and read most of yalls poetry and work, and I've commented on atleast one.

but I just wanted to thank you all once more!

on May. 23 2009 at 2:38 am
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

This poem was so literally brought tears to my I could relate to something like this. Keep up the good work, you have incredible talent!! :))

on May. 23 2009 at 12:19 am
EscapeVelocity GOLD, Moro, Illinois
12 articles 2 photos 19 comments
Same as what Jaquie. Only cookie dough ice cream:), and ot crying I dont ever cy even if I want to.:(

on May. 22 2009 at 8:29 pm
Kristi Desatnick GOLD, Lawrenceville, New Jersey
10 articles 1 photo 2 comments
This is simply amazing. As I was reading it I could picture the scene in my head. This really is inspirational. Keep up the good work.

on May. 22 2009 at 7:06 pm
Tony Shavers BRONZE, Oakland, California
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Great Poem brought back memories

LitDiva said...
on May. 22 2009 at 6:40 pm
I like that you didn't come right out and say he was being deployed... it was just implied. You also evoke a lot of emotion from your readers. Well done!

on May. 22 2009 at 4:47 pm
pinksage33 BRONZE, Woodstock, New York
4 articles 1 photo 211 comments
Amazing!!! very emotinal.

Jaquie BRONZE said...
on May. 22 2009 at 11:06 am
Jaquie BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
3 articles 0 photos 407 comments

Favorite Quote:
This is certainly one of my favorites: "I will become even more undignified than this, and I will be humiliated in my own eyes." -2 Samuel 6:22

That was incredibly depressing... But in a good I want to bawl my eyes out while clutching desperately to a carton of rocky-road ice-cream. Your style is very nice, and I loved the tear/bullet analogy. Keep writing.

God bless,