Her | Teen Ink


May 27, 2009
By Dandelion PLATINUM, Franklin, Massachusetts
Dandelion PLATINUM, Franklin, Massachusetts
20 articles 8 photos 173 comments

I see her at dinner the night before. Drugged and crazy, her eyes meet with mine for a millisecond. Giant, watery-blue orbs. Above heavy, heavy, purple bags. Wildly bloodshot. Threatening. Dangerous.

I know that to contend with her would be impossible. Let it slip. Just play with the Spaghetti O’s. Oops . . . one slipped off my spoon . . . dropped PLOP on the floor. It seems so loud only because it’s so quiet right now. Just breathing. Inhale. Exhale. Pick up the pasta. Hmm . . . try to break it in half. It slipped again! Go on in such a manner until she slides away from the table, silently, eerily, and collapses on the sofa with a desperate, obnoxious grunt.

Finally I can leave. I scoop the untouched, half-cooked, cold canned dinner into the snow outside. I like to watch the snow melt. I think it’s a brighter horizon.

I walk into my room. Trip on carpet fray, as always. Pull out elastics, along with hair. Ouch! French braids hurt--that’s one thing she’s good at. Kick off slippers with the gaping hole at the right big toe. Rub eyes with my fists. Flop in bed. Sleep.

Dawn comes like a scared pigeon, just comes over you and next thing you know, you’ve got a bird in your face and some white, sticky stuff on your c . . . cc . . . ccccoldd fleece jacket.

I’m getting ready for school now, Mom. Can you hear me? You’re usually up all night when you’re like that. I mean, off and on. You know what I mean. Hold on, you’re still on the couch?

I run to school the speed of light.

The author's comments:
Please note that this is ENTIRELY fictional. Nobody I know is like that. :)

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This article has 9 comments.

on Feb. 16 2010 at 10:28 am
Dandelion PLATINUM, Franklin, Massachusetts
20 articles 8 photos 173 comments
Thanks so much for the comments! I really appreciate them. :)

on Feb. 15 2010 at 7:39 pm
Robkingett PLATINUM, Tallahassee, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
When I was little they called me a liar, but now I'm grown up, they call me a writer.

i really really like this peice for its complexity, and the catchy onotopeias were spot on! wonderfull, and so vivid! nice!

on Jun. 19 2009 at 3:16 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

This is really good. I like how you use onomatopoeia in this piece. It really captures my attention. I love poems like that. Great job! By the way, Thank you so much for the comment. It is greatly appreciated.

on Jun. 18 2009 at 8:29 pm
Redsoxrule12 BRONZE, Topsfield, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"When life rains on your parade-- bring out the slip-and-slide"

Wow...that was really good. You are such a good writer!! GREAT POEM!

on Jun. 14 2009 at 8:41 pm
Dandelion PLATINUM, Franklin, Massachusetts
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I also like Mean Girls, The Shining, and Seinfeld like you, too!

on Jun. 14 2009 at 8:39 pm
Dandelion PLATINUM, Franklin, Massachusetts
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That is crazy! I guess we have a lot in common. XD

on Jun. 14 2009 at 3:37 am
EleanorRigby PLATINUM, New York City, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"The optomist proclaims we live in the best of worlds, and the pessimist fears this is true." - James Branch Cabell

this is a cool poem, the imagery is really good. and thanks for commenting on my poem, "angels". eleanor rigby is one of my favorites too, and i saw that you like charles dickens he's also one of my favorites, and you know what's even weirder? my name's abigail too. im not joking.

on Jun. 10 2009 at 12:32 am
cmoney1994 PLATINUM, Newark, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Be the best you an be as you can see i try to be by writing poetry.

This was a great poem check mine out called Marriage or check out WHY name is Christian S

on Jun. 8 2009 at 7:27 pm
AJ Krzysko BRONZE, Tower Lakes, Illinois
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Nice job well written