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Left Out

July 26, 2009
By Electricity PLATINUM, Bradenton, Florida
Electricity PLATINUM, Bradenton, Florida
30 articles 0 photos 271 comments

Mother without her child
Rocking-chair without a dreamer
Christmas without hope
A wooden swing without laughter
Angels without a heart
Child without life
Sandbox without toy soldiers
Writer without a pen
Lovers without love
An ending without end

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This article has 3 comments.

on Aug. 9 2009 at 4:55 pm
phoebe-bird SILVER, Shanghai, Other
7 articles 2 photos 8 comments
I like it when it gets deeper and sadder, and in the end it really moves me from a spiritual level. You are such a great writer and I think we may have a lot to talk as well. Can you give me your contact information and just let me know if you are in China. -Liu

on Aug. 8 2009 at 2:40 am
heart_on_my_sleeve BRONZE, Clearwater, Florida
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Well-behaved women rarely make history."

I love the idea in this poem! This wave of sudden, somber understanding crashes on you at the first line! You should've written more! Keep going! It's so moving! Btw I'm the girl who wrote "Crystals" about my friend who committed suicide? I stopped writing stuff on this site for a while

Zero_K DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 8 2009 at 12:56 am
Zero_K DIAMOND, Moosic, Pennsylvania
83 articles 0 photos 435 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's no fun if you're not insane, otherwise you grow up to be an accountant." -Moi

I like this, it gets me thinking about what things would be like without certain things. It makes me kinda sad. Thanks for all your comments. I belive the word you were looking for is metaphor.