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Love at 4:15 PM

March 3, 2009
By Andrew Dobies GOLD, Long Grove, Illinois
Andrew Dobies GOLD, Long Grove, Illinois
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The guard rail drops and the blinking red lights begin,
that insatiable bell ringing monotonously
and beating down the sun who sits on the horizon, slowly sinking.
The beige leather of the car is slowly warming
after sitting in the cold parking lot all day.
Outside the train begins to rumble by,
effortlessly melting through space and playing on the rails
an afternoon scherzo in the early spring.
The bell is drowned in the rushing of the train
that seems to continue forever.
How I wish that it would,
that I might linger for aeons yet listening to the roar of the train
and the gentle flutter of your breath,
in the golden late-day sun that sits upon us,
relieving the aches and salt of winter with a promise that smells like crocuses.
You groan, impatient and beautifully mortal,
and turn on the radio to a commercial for some mattress store.
You wrap your hand around mine and smile as the last car passes
and we roll on towards home.
You'll never see what I see in those afternoon freight trains
or the magnificence of simply sitting back as the world spins.
But your hand is warm, the palm slightly dry,
and I don't care if we can't trundle on forever like the trains,
carrying cargo from Canada to who knows where,
because for at least the next ten minutes I have you
and time stands still to the flashing of your smile and the ringing of your laugh,
waiting for our fleeting lives to rattle past.

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on Oct. 19 2011 at 11:56 am
modifiedsoul BRONZE, Grapevine, Texas
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you really inspire me, and I mean that. You are an amazing writing, and I hope you acknowlodge that. I love everything you've written and sumbitted to Teenink

on Nov. 1 2010 at 11:04 pm
christian.e SILVER, Dutch Harbor, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
The eternal silence of these infinite spaces frightens me --Pascal

Your a great writer. Didja know that?/:) hahaha. Its ahmayzing you have like what 4 out of your 11 pieces published in the magazine, thats soo awesome:) for your fans sake's keep writing

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on Oct. 10 2010 at 8:10 pm
WhiteShadows, Ocala, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
You've gotta work like you don't need the money/love like you'll never be hurt/
Sing like no one is listening/ and live like it's heaven on Earth.-Anonymous

That was awesome. It was really breathtaking.

on Mar. 12 2010 at 6:59 pm
alisaysroar GOLD, N. Kingstown, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
"Weighed down under the shallow sunrise, the radiance seeping through my aqua ceiling, and reminding me that I chased my own demise--we've all constructed our own ends with the illusions of beginnings."

You have so much talent, it kind of scares me. I wish I could e half as good as you are with capturing moments and feelings in words. You just somehow know how to put it together. A lot of your stuff is amazing, unlike mine. You are truly gifted :)

on Jul. 9 2009 at 3:35 am
despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The heart has its reasons which reason does not know." -Pascal, Pensees, 1670

Beautiful! This should be published! I love it! You are a great poet, and I love how you capture the feeling and emotion in your poems! Keep up the great work!