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Thunderstorm MAG

September 18, 2009
By kinzeejp BRONZE, Rice Lake, Wisconsin
kinzeejp BRONZE, Rice Lake, Wisconsin
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When your life grows dull and heavy,
It starts to rain.
The clock strikes late,
drops pour.

I step into the falling tears,
coming from above,
an attempt to get closer.
I walk out in the darkness,
like I crawl into your blackened life.

Thunder disturbs the earth,
and keeps my heart throbbing.
Kind of the same feeling I get,
When you reject me,

With me I carry paper
and a pencil,
In case you decide to
let me carve into your life.

Once I get to the end
of the soaking dock,
I put my pencil to the paper.
Pierced, paper's wet.
Rejection, throbbing.

And finally I look up,
With nothing else to lose but you.
Reflection of lightning,
tells me it's all right.

I dip my feet into the freezing water.
Chills run up my back and I get it,
You'll never let me in.

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This article has 5 comments.

on Dec. 10 2013 at 2:14 am
TheDolphin ELITE, Iloilo, Other
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i like the way you write. Splendid!

on Feb. 10 2010 at 11:16 am
MsRocker SILVER, Blahblahblah, Other
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Favorite Quote:
be strong now because things will get better it might be stormy now but it cant rain forver

great job, i admire your ability to write this well, nice job, but it also made me sad. keep on writing!

on Feb. 4 2010 at 4:35 pm
riley1516 PLATINUM, Lake Zurich, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Don’t ask what the world needs. Ask what makes you come alive, and go do it. Because what the world needs is people who have come alive.” -Howard Thurman

I really like this poem!

on Jan. 31 2010 at 11:02 am
CaptainFabulous. GOLD, Union, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:

"When life hands you lemons,make BEEF STEW!"
-Andy Milanokis?(sp)

this is really amazing

sad but amazing

i like how you keep putting in the word "throbbing" to express your emotion

read some of mine please?

on Jan. 30 2010 at 2:39 pm
ohmygosh. that is so amazing. kudos! you really captured the feelings of this person!