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a gentle touch of breath

January 31, 2010
By poetic_natural GOLD, Jefferson, Wisconsin
poetic_natural GOLD, Jefferson, Wisconsin
16 articles 0 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"you know you're in love because you can't fall asleep, because reality is finally better than your dreams"

A gentle touch of breath
The wind brushes my cheek
A slight feeling of death
leaves me unable to speak.

It feels so quiet
as i walk along the dusty roads
the wind is at its highest
as the wind makes my skin feel cold.

The wind makes me feel like I'm flying.
the wind is like a ticking clock
i feel like I'm being lifted without even trying.
and there's only a matter of time before it stops

The author's comments:
this started out as an assignment but i actually liked it so i decided to put it on teenink....hope you guys like it

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Miseltoe GOLD said...
on May. 30 2010 at 6:22 pm
Miseltoe GOLD, Boneville, Georgia
15 articles 2 photos 49 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'm a loser and I love to lose. Each time I lose its different, it teaches me something else... but winning loses its glamour after the first few times. so I love to lose

I like it but I think the use of wind so many times in stanza 3 is repetitive but besides that its good. Its got a hint of you though the light and the dark nice imagery