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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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camc1_03 said...
on Jun. 11 at 1:05 pm
camc1_03, Mount Olive, New Jersey
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I love the symbolism and descriptions used in the poem. It gives a really good and different perspective of somebody else's life and what it might be like to live as that person.

on May. 24 at 2:59 pm
jbritomariani BRONZE, Aurora, Colorado
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This is really good! The chain was a really good touch and I think especially the rhyme scheme carried through really well. You might still want to expand on the idea of the chain, especially just the sensation of it as you attempt to fly. At the same time I think you did a really good job.

on May. 12 at 7:21 pm
lindsey-liu BRONZE, Redmond, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
The duty of youth is to challenge corruption. - Kurt Cobain

Im speechless, so beautifully articulated..

on Apr. 23 at 11:16 am
McLaughlin_It BRONZE, Vista, California
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Favorite Quote:
All my life they let me know
How far I would not go
But inside the beast still grows
Waiting, chewing through the ropes
Who are you to change this world?
Silly boy
No one needs to hear your words
Let it go
Carnivore, carnivore
Won't you come digest me?
Take away everything I am
Bring it to an end

That's awesome dude, keep up the great work :)

Epi BRONZE said...
on Mar. 29 at 12:58 pm
Epi BRONZE, New York City, New York
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Wow! Great job... keep up the grat work :)

on Mar. 18 at 7:55 am
Anna_993 BRONZE, Delhi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
If life were predictable it would cease to be life, and be without flavor.

That was so awesome!

on Mar. 15 at 9:59 am
toothlessclay, New Bethlehem, Pennsylvania
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Dang, that's awesome! Great job man!

Kaidrinkstea said...
on Dec. 20 2020 at 8:42 am
Kaidrinkstea, Emmaus, Pennsylvania
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It was really well written and definitely written well! You gave me so inspo :D

L_G_Hall said...
on Sep. 22 2020 at 4:26 pm
L_G_Hall, None, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
Why Spiders? Why couldn't it be "follow the butterflies"?






~Ronald Weasley "Chamber of Secrets"

I really liked this. It is a really good poem that touches your heart

on Aug. 30 2020 at 4:24 pm
FantasyManiac, New Delhi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"No Mourners, No Funerals"- Six of Crows by Leigh Bardugo
"Have you ever asked yourself, do Monsters make war, or does war create monsters"- An Ember in the Ashes by Sabaa Tahir.
"We are the darkest acts made light" by Victoria Schwab

Ooh, really amazing twist in the end!! Really love the vague meaning behind the poem.

on Aug. 5 2020 at 9:06 pm
FirstSteps5000 BRONZE, Bethesda, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"If you reach for the stars, you'll just get the stars. Reach for the heavens and you'll get the stars thrown in." - unknown
"These aren't just stories,"... …"They're whole kingdoms. They're worlds. They're perspectives and opinions you can't offer, from lives you haven't lived." - The Isle of the Lost
"When someone does something hurtful, they have to admit it... [t]hen they have to be punished for it. And maybe then, if they apologize and change, maybe -maybe- *then* they get forgiven." - The One and Only Bob

This is incredible!!! I wish I could write as well as this!

on May. 26 2020 at 1:47 am
somewhatthere, Indio, California
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Favorite Quote:
Do you want to be the tail of the dragon or the head of the snake? - Trinity (my dear friend :))

wow this is so good!!

Nika BRONZE said...
on Jan. 16 2020 at 8:02 pm
Nika BRONZE, Newton, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Pursue your passions; write on.

Wow that last part in particular was a really great choice of language. Woah, good job, author!

on Nov. 22 2019 at 2:25 am
sarahshahzad BRONZE, Other, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Mother Teresa, Eleanor Roosevelt, Helen Keller,

amazing..! love this so much...

on Nov. 17 2019 at 11:06 pm
insanefoxgurl07 BRONZE, Fountain, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"If you're always trying to be normal, you will never know how amazing you can be."
~ Maya Angelou

Those last few lines- ouch. What a twist.
Great poem though, really makes you think.

on Oct. 4 2019 at 9:59 am
Jejsndhjejenejd, China, Ohio
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This was a very religious experience

on Sep. 30 2019 at 2:58 pm
_-Dark_Shadow-_, Orlando, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"Shoot for the stars, because if u miss, you'll land among the stars"

Bruh -_- really? Meh..being 15 is SOOOO weird to meh

on Sep. 19 2019 at 11:08 am
GIBBYGIBBS6969696969, Tomah, Wisconsin
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you getting at takein co ck up your a ss

thiCCman said...
on Sep. 19 2019 at 11:06 am
thiCCman, Tomah, Wisconsin
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Nah you gey but this poem was good at being bad

on Sep. 19 2019 at 11:05 am
GIBBYGIBBS6969696969, Tomah, Wisconsin
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thiCCman is gae