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Becoming Strong MAG

April 12, 2012
By FallenAngel2012 GOLD, Decherd, Tennessee
FallenAngel2012 GOLD, Decherd, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
Many many many :)

Picking up a pen and putting down
the sword
Causes more harm than ever before
Letting out the feelings society told me
were wrong
Stepping up from the shadows, with the message I am strong
You pointed out my flaws as if I couldn't
already see them
Turning myself into my worst enemy
But now I'm facing those stares and
whispers that used to cripple me
From these bonds of hatred I can and
will break free
No one can stop me now, I am no slave to man and their thoughts of right and wrong
Who are you to say I don't belong?
The definition of beauty is nonexistent
A sense of belonging seems so distant
They put strict limitations on who we are
expected to be
If you dare to be different, you'll be
criticized, I guarantee
They will make you feel small, worthless, and insignificant
But in reality you are simply magnificent
Being yourself shouldn't come with a cost
to pay
People talk about change that fails to
happen every day
Nobody can ever know the torture of hate
Or the emotional scars it creates

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on Oct. 3 2014 at 2:50 pm
1libbylulu BRONZE, Brandon, Mississippi
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Favorite Quote:
stay strong

this is so well explained

Zolenz DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 26 2013 at 8:45 am
Zolenz DIAMOND, Musquodoboit Harbour, NS, Other
65 articles 0 photos 173 comments

Favorite Quote:
The pain that have cost us, the evils which have never happened.
- Thomas Jefferson

This is amazing, thats all i have to say. i could pick it apart, but its awesome from the start. could you check out some  of my stuff?

on Jul. 2 2013 at 6:10 pm
Quartermaster PLATINUM, Los Angeles, California
21 articles 8 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
"They tell us sir that we are weak. Unable to cope with so formidable an adversary. But when will we be stronger?"

I liked your use of irony (picking up a pen and putting down the sword causes more harm than ever before) to catch the reader's attention. I like the isolation of short phrases like "will break free." They force the reader to take in what your saying phrase by phrase, and in turn think about each phrase more. Also I agree that we should "dare to be different". However one should also admit that he/she is indeed his own worst enemy, and take a stand not only against the world, but against the demons inside. The latter I believe is more important than the former.

Bluez BRONZE said...
on Jun. 5 2013 at 12:37 pm
Bluez BRONZE, Huntsville, Alabama
4 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Happiness is not something you obtain, its something you decide.

Absolutley Amzing!

on Jun. 4 2013 at 6:27 pm
Meghan13133 SILVER, Columbus, Montana
7 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
Unless someone like you cares a whole awful lot, nothing is going to get better. It's not. -The Lorax

This is a beautiful poem, I love it. Great job!

on May. 20 2013 at 9:29 am
amberrenay SILVER, Lapeer, Michigan
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This is a wonderful piece of writing, its so true! This ties great with my life, i just think you are an amazing writer!

JNajeraO1205 said...
on Mar. 29 2013 at 3:36 pm
Really cool. Nice job on it. I could read it over and over again.

on Mar. 27 2013 at 9:57 pm
Propheteer GOLD, Sudbury, Other
13 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
“The only thing that I see that is distinctly different about me is I'm not afraid to die on a treadmill. I will not be out-worked, period. You might have more talent than me, you might be smarter than me, you might be sexier than me, you might be all of those things you got it on me in nine categories. But if we get on the treadmill together, there's two things: You're getting off first, or I'm going to die. It's really that simple, right?
You're not going to out-work me. It's such a simple, basic concept. The guy who is willing to hustle the most is going to be the guy that just gets that loose ball. The majority of people who aren't getting the places they want or aren't achieving the things that they want in this business is strictly based on hustle. It's strictly based on being out-worked; it's strictly based on missing crucial opportunities. I say all the time if you stay ready, you ain't gotta get ready.”

― Will Smith

One of thosepoems that would be awesome as a song too. Very nicely done.

on Mar. 26 2013 at 10:13 pm
Mywickedself BRONZE, Allen, Texas
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I love the strong use of words and the message. It's something like i would write. I can so relate!

La'Toya12 said...
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on Mar. 23 2013 at 11:05 pm
LeighFreyre SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
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Hey, thought that it was really good, jst one constructive thing that I thought of when reading that i think would make it fabulous. Right now you are ending all of the lines on the rhyme, but i think that it would be interesting to have each full phrase as a line and embed the rhyme within the line. This is really precious, tho, I love ur sentence structure! Fab work!

on Mar. 15 2013 at 1:10 am
pulledheartstring, San Jose, California
0 articles 0 photos 54 comments

Favorite Quote:
The weak can never forgive. Forgiveness is the attribute of the strong. -- Mahatma Gandhi

I really like the language in this poem. Thanks for sharing. :)

on Mar. 14 2013 at 10:12 am
HeavenCooley GOLD, Stillwater, Oklahoma
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This was great. I loved it, keep up the good work.

on Mar. 7 2013 at 6:52 pm
thegreatmorry BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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awesome:) this was quite the poem

JRaye PLATINUM said...
on Mar. 6 2013 at 3:07 pm
JRaye PLATINUM, Dorr, Michigan
43 articles 10 photos 523 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you build your house far enough away from Trouble, then Trouble will never find you."

"Have you ever looked fear in the face and said, 'I just don't care.'?"

Beautiful! This is so good, keep writting!

on Mar. 5 2013 at 7:00 pm
foreverSmall PLATINUM, Brighton, Michigan
23 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
Psalm 23:2-4

Your poem AWOKE me. I am so glad you wrote this. You are a very talented writer. I think everyone should read this! I am so glad I heard you because your words are strong, beautiful, and utterly true

on Mar. 5 2013 at 7:33 am
MadLibs PLATINUM, Poquoson, Virginia
34 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
It wouldn't allow me to fit the entire verse here but it's 1 Corinthians 13:4-8
Love never fails.

I love how this is relatable and passionate in a subtle way. Great piece.

on Mar. 3 2013 at 6:34 pm
lexi-94-95 SILVER, Frankfort, Indiana
8 articles 8 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
signing off,
with tears as my witness...

girl this is a gift go far with this...its amazing....definatly worth your wild....i loved it

on Mar. 2 2013 at 4:42 pm
GlittaDreamz SILVER, Vancouver, Other
6 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
Its Really the Little Things that Matter the Most

You can almost make this a rap!

on Mar. 2 2013 at 6:18 am
thatunknownthing DIAMOND, Dubai, Other
67 articles 0 photos 208 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery, but today is a gift; that's why they call it the present"

loved this. beautifully written.