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October 4, 2012
By sadesdd DIAMOND, Elma, Iowa
sadesdd DIAMOND, Elma, Iowa
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Sometimes I feel like running barefoot at night
I feel like I can't hold in happiness
I let it out in spurts of giggles
I go up and down the sidewalk
Feeling free
Fear is pushed to the back of my mind
I take in all that's around me
I see all for what it is
I don't get run down but built up
It seems so insignificant
But really
I am learning something deep about life
That only a few people do

The author's comments:
One day a year in the summer, my family on my dad's side comes for a get together. My cousins and I swim until dark, then run up and down the sidewalks and streets while fireworks are going off for the town celebration. I hope you get the innocence and deep life lessons I tried to portray in this poem.

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on Oct. 9 2012 at 7:55 pm
sadesdd DIAMOND, Elma, Iowa
90 articles 0 photos 213 comments
Thank you for your feedback:)

on Oct. 9 2012 at 5:14 pm
Zithia PLATINUM, Cambridge, Massachusetts
27 articles 16 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It makes no difference who or what you are, old or young, black or white, pagan, Jew, or Christian, I want to love you all and be loved by you all, and I mean to have your love." -Victoria Woodhull

I absoluetly love the rhythm of this poem and the pattern in the syntax.  I feel like describing running as free is a bit of a cliche, though.  Try to come up with another adjective.