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brown MAG

June 27, 2013
By meghaagarwal BRONZE, Los Altos, California
meghaagarwal BRONZE, Los Altos, California
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it's strange because i never liked the color
brown, but as i gaze into your eyes, i can't help but fall irrevocably
in love with the creamy, smooth, rich color
of mocha coffee, and i hesitate in
turning away
from you, because i don't know
if i can function completely without
the caffeine that is your eyes

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Izzy777 SILVER said...
on Jun. 24 2015 at 9:02 am
Izzy777 SILVER, Tampa, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"I always wonder why birds stay in one place when they can fly anywhere around the world. But then I ask myself the same question."


on Jun. 9 2015 at 1:15 pm
darkrose97 BRONZE, Rochester, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't let the behavior of others destroy your inner peace"

This is truly beautiful

on May. 28 2015 at 11:44 am
Benfigueroa BRONZE, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Everything you imagine,Can be as REAL as things you can see."-Unknown

DAMN!! get'em that's what im talking about, love this piece of art !

on Mar. 14 2015 at 9:50 pm
beAWESOMEstayAWESOME BRONZE, New York City, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Work hard in silence and let your accomplishments make the noise."

o my gosh I have brown eyes too! This made me feel special :) AMAZING poem btw. #ifeelspecial

CloBeau BRONZE said...
on Feb. 27 2015 at 10:41 pm
CloBeau BRONZE, Hong Kong, Other
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Favorite Quote:
“All that is gold does not glitter,
Not all those who wander are lost;
The old that is strong does not wither,
Deep roots are not reached by the frost."

It's a light and fun piece! When reading the first few lines i was thinking "hmm slightly cheesy?" but then i read on and found that the way you use it makes it really cute, free and funny :)

on Feb. 26 2015 at 11:17 pm
Temma1026 BRONZE, New York, New York
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Short, sweet, simple. Yet so relatable and effective. I love the extended metaphor of coffee.

Priyaaaaaa said...
on Feb. 25 2015 at 6:14 am
This evokes a feeling that we've slll felt--the desire to see nothing but that one person because it gives us nothing but joy.

on Jan. 25 2015 at 10:34 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

Hey! I love the reference to coffee. Yum. I also find it interesting that you lack capitalization. Is this purposeful, or it because you're in that awkward situation where you accidentally press "A" instead of the shift button, so you just don't capitalize? The spacing is also pretty cool. Congratulations on being on the front page and getting published! I'll look for your poem in the mag.

NoniDoni GOLD said...
on Jan. 19 2015 at 12:49 pm
NoniDoni GOLD, Calabasas, California
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Thought provoking! I enjoyed reading it! post comments and check out my work!

on Jan. 12 2015 at 10:44 pm
moonlitashes BRONZE, FREMONT, California
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your poem is so creative! every line ties in together perfectly

on Jan. 5 2015 at 8:10 pm
NikkiRobzz13 BRONZE, Naperville, Illinois
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This was so great! I especially loved the last line two lines, "if i can function completely without the caffeine that is your eyes", it really tied the whole thing together. Beautiful!

on Dec. 30 2014 at 11:17 pm
MariahPotter PLATINUM, Lansing, Michigan
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“We dream in our waking moments, and walk in our sleep.” -scarlett letter

It was pretty good :)

Paakhi said...
on Dec. 24 2014 at 6:57 am good.

on Nov. 23 2014 at 10:24 pm
countrygirl28 GOLD, Colleyville, Texas
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"Expose yourself to your deepest fear. After that, fear has no power, and the fear of freedom shrinks and vanishes. You are free." -Jim Morrison
"Don't think or judge. Just listen." -Sarah Dessen

I got chills reading this! Your poem is incrediby spectacular.

on Nov. 17 2014 at 10:57 am
Anyuhhhh BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
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I loved this metaphor with the brown eyes and the coffee! It was a really great poem, but I would suggest maybe adding on to this or making it longer because it is really interesting and I would like to see more of your work.

on Oct. 26 2014 at 3:43 am
Ellie411 BRONZE, Fridley, Minnesota
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This is absolutely gorgeous. Well done!

on Sep. 29 2014 at 9:29 pm
Zaraclaylime DIAMOND, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
So I suppose my simple advice is: Love your life. I only say that because your life is what you have to give.
-Tom Hiddleston

Holy cow beautiful

Rosie630 GOLD said...
on Sep. 18 2014 at 8:29 am
Rosie630 GOLD, Wilmington, Delaware
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Favorite Quote:
"The difference between ordinary and extraordinary is that little extra." ~Jimmy Johnson

I love this, how the color brown relates to their eyes and coffee throughout, like a big metaphor! Great job.

on Aug. 19 2014 at 7:47 am
Ayushi18 BRONZE, Surat, Other
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Excuse my enthusiasm, for I am really drunk with intellectual vision whenever I take a pencil into my hand...!

my Indian friend, this touches to deep bottom in my heart....when u detest something but gradually fall in for it...

on Jul. 31 2014 at 11:43 am
TheComet PLATINUM, Mostaganem, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Speak when you are angry and you will make the best speech you will ever regret" -Ambrose Bierce
" Be yourself! Everybody else is already taken ;)"
"Don't go where the path leads you. Go instead where there's no path and leave a trail ;)"-R.W.Emerson

:D your poem was so cool ;) you truly have a talent. and I certainly know how you feel ;) I liked the detail and the way you created pictures in the reader's mind so everyone would somehow see what you saw. I loved your poem it definitly deserves a 5 stars rating :D keep up the great work