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At the Park MAG

October 8, 2008
By Carolina SILVER, Cedar Rapids, Iowa
Carolina SILVER, Cedar Rapids, Iowa
8 articles 3 photos 32 comments

When I went to the park today,
Two little children came to play.
They played hide and go seek
behind the trees
Running and screaming
in delight.
After dunking their heads and feet
under the cold fountain,
they leave the faucet on
and walk away.
The little girl runs to catch up
with her brother,
pigtails flying,
and I get up to
turn off the faucet.

The author's comments:
This poem created at a park near my house.

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This article has 22 comments.

wertyuiop said...
on Feb. 20 2018 at 4:59 pm
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This is really bad I hate it it's poo work

on Aug. 25 2012 at 1:30 am
joejinny BRONZE, Kerala, Other
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credibility is like virginity once you lose it you can never get it back

briliiant i like it

on Feb. 9 2012 at 11:24 pm
mammothfrk PLATINUM, Mammoth Lakes, California
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Favorite Quote:
This is your life, are you who you want to be?

good...still trying to figure it out kinda...unless its just so simple that im missing it...but good.

on Jan. 18 2012 at 8:58 pm
Carolina SILVER, Cedar Rapids, Iowa
8 articles 3 photos 32 comments
Yeah I was in 8th grade when I wrote this, but you can interpret it how you want to.

on Dec. 27 2011 at 8:32 am
Rheanne96 SILVER, Lancaster, Pennsylvania
7 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you don't like something change it. If you can't change it, change your attitude". - Maya Angelou

that's an awsome connection!

on Jul. 26 2011 at 12:51 pm
EnigmaticBeing PLATINUM, Santa Barbara, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Be careful what you set your heart upon - for it will surely be yours.'
James A. Baldwin

I don't know if I'm overthinking this but I see a metaphor here. Turning off the faucet after the little girl ran off reminds me of how people always tried to shield me from everything. All of the dark truths... The lies... It was all pouring from the faucet and you turned it off shielding them from the truth.

on Jul. 26 2011 at 10:45 am
fatchance96 BRONZE, Schaumburg, Illinois
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I absolutely love how this poem is put together! It makes me wonder, what would have happened if that faucet was left on and nobody bothered to turn it off? I am one of those environmental freaks, and I would get super mad if someone left the light/water on. I just have to turn it off myself.... but i love this. Thanks so much:)


on Mar. 16 2011 at 10:49 pm
Dreaming_Out_Loud PLATINUM, Holden, Massachusetts
29 articles 14 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The clock is running. Make the most of today. Time waits for no man. Yesterday is history. Tomorrow is a mystery. Today is a gift. That's why it is called the present."

I really like that this poem isn't about anyhting that important but the very fact that you wrote a poem about it and the graceful (for lack of a better word) way it was written somehow makes it all meaningful. Beautiful. Just beautiful.

Lily1 SILVER said...
on Mar. 17 2010 at 10:34 am
Lily1 SILVER, Carbondale, Illinois
6 articles 9 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Like you, its true treasure etched within.”-One Night With The King

thanks for posting this. I like how flowy and nice it sounds. It sounds relaxing and i feel like i want to be there. Thanks Again!

Thrush BRONZE said...
on Mar. 7 2010 at 3:28 pm
Thrush BRONZE, Tegaad, Other
4 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Live life to it's fullest extent, it's the only life you've got" "Enjoy yourself, be yourself, love yourself"

Very pretty.

on Oct. 5 2009 at 8:31 pm
Carolina SILVER, Cedar Rapids, Iowa
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Hey, if you don't like my works, can you please tell me why you don't like it or what I can improve? It's bewildering to receive emails telling you someone rated all your poems 1 out of 5 stars...

HOPEMVP said...
on Sep. 22 2009 at 1:47 pm
great use of rhyme n rhythem

on Sep. 14 2009 at 8:47 pm
distant_dreamer GOLD, Belmont, New Hampshire
12 articles 6 photos 497 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a climb, but the view is great!"

Thanks! :) I love your work so much!!! Keep on writing, you have a special gift! :) Thanks so much, It does take courage to express my faith, but then I feel so happy that I have to share it!! :)

Your friend Always!


on Sep. 7 2009 at 1:10 pm
Carolina SILVER, Cedar Rapids, Iowa
8 articles 3 photos 32 comments
There isn't really anything to get, it's just a poem. You may interpret it as you wish.

on Aug. 11 2009 at 6:04 am PLATINUM, Beaumont, Other
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Very clever, sweet and innocent but very mature too. Nice contrast. I wish I could get a comment on my stuff like you do. Keep it up.

on Aug. 7 2009 at 11:32 pm
poetic_natural GOLD, Jefferson, Wisconsin
16 articles 0 photos 66 comments

Favorite Quote:
"you know you're in love because you can't fall asleep, because reality is finally better than your dreams"

this poem is amazing you have real talent

on Aug. 7 2009 at 7:20 pm
delizabethl PLATINUM, Linesville, Pennsylvania
33 articles 0 photos 33 comments
I don't get it.

on Aug. 7 2009 at 3:27 pm
despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
79 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The heart has its reasons which reason does not know." -Pascal, Pensees, 1670

Fantastic poem! I love it! It paints such a vivid picture that everyone can submerse themselves in to. Congrats on the publication! P.S. Please check out some of my work, I'd love to hear your comments! Thanks so much, and happy writing!

AmnyR BRONZE said...
on Aug. 7 2009 at 1:12 pm
AmnyR BRONZE, Clifton, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 134 comments

Favorite Quote:
To the world, you may be just one person, but to one person, you may be the whole world. ~unknown

great work, i love it.

Rasika GOLD said...
on Aug. 7 2009 at 6:59 am
Rasika GOLD, MUMBAI, Other
11 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
dream high ,think high!!!

wow very well written and congrats on getting into the teenmag .