Thunderstorm | Teen Ink


July 30, 2014
By Longlegs GOLD, Greeneville, Tennessee
Longlegs GOLD, Greeneville, Tennessee
16 articles 0 photos 84 comments

As knives in the dark
Where the wind beats violently against nothing
A great tempest fumes

The tear of a raging flood

Crash of thunder
The clash of armor
Roar of many waters
The voice of the Lord

Arcs creep through the weeds
Crack of lightning shatters the night sky
Piercing the moon

Yet the promise stays faithful
There is a rainbow

The author's comments:
Does anyone have any particularly good title ideas?

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on Sep. 2 2014 at 1:16 pm
guard-girl GOLD, Clover, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Trust in the Lord with all your heart, and do not depend on your own understanding. Seek His will in all you do, and he will show you which path to take."
Proverbs 3:5-6

Wow, I love how descriptive you are! It seemed like I was there in the thunderstorm, witnessing the natural struggle. You did a fantastic job! I love it!

Longlegs GOLD said...
on Aug. 19 2014 at 9:31 am
Longlegs GOLD, Greeneville, Tennessee
16 articles 0 photos 84 comments
No, it is a formating error.

on Aug. 15 2014 at 4:57 pm
readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
27 articles 0 photos 425 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather fail because I fell on my own face than fall because someone tripped me up
~Jhonen Vasquez

Is the space in the poem intentional or a format error?  I thought it was a mistake at first, but then i realized it fits very well with the theme of the poem.  The third stanza (or second?  the one that starts with 'crash') has an interesting combination of slant rhyme and alliteration, I think you should do more of that!

on Aug. 7 2014 at 6:24 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1486 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

I absoluetly love this. This is absolutely beautiful. I find what you're saying in the poem, very true. Thank you for sharing this. It's wondeful.