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the day i swallowed the sun

May 26, 2018
By saltyranchers SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
saltyranchers SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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the day i finally caught the sun
between my lips
was the day i was set free
from the iron cage
with its iron bars,
that crushed my arms
and shattered my lungs.
i closed my eyes
and let the golden flames
drip down the back of my throat
and coat my tongue like honey.
i felt it spread through
my chest,
felt the thing i
had been chasing
for years
and years
and years.
i watched as the inky blackness
that had suffocated me
for so many silent nights
bled from my fingertips and
sunk into the dirt,
staining the daisies
and wilting the poppies.
a golden bead
down my cheek,
and i wondered
why my tears
had never tasted so
sitting down with the sunflowers,
i watched the cotton candy
float across the baby blue sky,
and began writing about
the day i swallowed the sun.

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magic_ida GOLD said...
on Jun. 30 2022 at 5:51 pm
magic_ida GOLD, Dallas, Texas
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This is genuinely beautiful, creative, and smooth😩

on Apr. 4 2022 at 11:57 am
swaggyserr SILVER, Paris, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
“A small body of determined spirits fired by an unquenchable faith in their mission can alter the course of history.” ~Mahatma Gandhi

You have so much talent- this is by far the best poem i've ever read. never stop writing.

on Feb. 10 2022 at 4:33 pm
dunsmores1 GOLD, Ledyard, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
There's a million things I haven't done, but just you wait."

~Hamilton (Via Lin-Manuel Miranda)

THIS IS SO GREAT! Wish I could write with this vision <3

SamM07 said...
on Dec. 14 2021 at 8:53 am
SamM07, Huntersville, North Carolina
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Great job! I felt like I was really eating the sun while reading it.

on Nov. 13 2021 at 6:12 am
poetstears GOLD, Columbus, Ohio
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WOW. I dont even know what to say that was amazing. I was tasting the sun go down my throat, and the tears flowing down my face.

on Jun. 17 2021 at 8:47 am
Adrika_15 SILVER, Midnapur West, Other
7 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
No one told us, that love is a garden,
We just simply started believing that spring is beautiful

Wow! The metaphors and imagery are so strong. It felt so real! Great work!

on Apr. 23 2021 at 10:55 am
ellareadsbooks BRONZE, Cambridge, Ontario
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Favorite Quote:
"The purpose of a storyteller is not to tell you how to think, but to give you questions to think upon." - Brandon Sanderson

I love this, the imagery was so vivid!

aubreyvernon said...
on Apr. 1 2021 at 10:16 am
aubreyvernon, Grandville, Michigan
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I love this poem!!

on Apr. 1 2021 at 6:45 am
SparrowSun ELITE, X, Vermont
201 articles 23 photos 1052 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It Will Be Good." (complicated semi-spiritual emotional story.)

"Upon his bench the pieces lay
As if an artwork on display
Of gears and hands
And wire-thin bands
That glisten in dim candle play." -Janice T., Clockwork[love that poem, dont know why, im not steampunk]

i love it its beautiful!

Dre_2021 said...
on Oct. 15 2020 at 8:33 am
Dre_2021, Ewing, New Jersey
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I really liked the symbolism you showed in this poem

on Aug. 16 2019 at 9:05 am
imjasminemiller, Chicago, Illinois
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I really like it, REminds me of the wat I write.

on Jun. 27 2019 at 2:23 pm
mackara_lynn_rose BRONZE, Coeur D Alene, Idaho
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Favorite Quote:
"The moon taught me it's ok to go through phases and the sun taught me that no matter how many times I fall, I can still keep rising."
"Your value does not decrease based on someone's inability to see your worth."

Wow, that's amazing!!! Keep it up!

cheythepoet said...
on Jan. 22 2019 at 1:50 pm
cheythepoet, El Paso, Texas
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i don't even have words for how brilliant this is, thank you for writing and thank you for sharing it. <3

on Dec. 19 2018 at 4:47 pm
kristjanscott BRONZE, Columbia, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Atticus,he was real nice...."

"Most people are,sout,when you finally see them"

-To Kill A Mockingbird,HAPPER LEE

i want to swallow the sun!

on Dec. 19 2018 at 11:15 am
jakejh PLATINUM, Murphysboro, Illinois
32 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't set boundaries for yourself.
Because building boundaries is only going to keep you from doing the things you want to do.

This is amazingly vivid. Keep up writing awesome poetry. Feel free to check out my poetry if you don't mind.

on Nov. 28 2018 at 2:08 pm
Sophia_LaPalme DIAMOND, Loxley, Alabama
57 articles 22 photos 87 comments

Favorite Quote:
“In three words I can sum up everything I've learned about life: it goes on.”
― Robert Frost

Wow! That was proof that simplicity is beautiful.

on Oct. 24 2018 at 3:51 pm
cat_the_creative GOLD, Austin, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
All endings are beginnings


Catniss SILVER said...
on Oct. 20 2018 at 12:53 pm
Catniss SILVER, Jakarta, Other
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So beautifully and uniquely. Nice use of symbolism.

SonnyT BRONZE said...
on Oct. 16 2018 at 9:25 am
SonnyT BRONZE, Columbus, Ohio
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This is beautiful! The language, the imagery, I really enjoyed reading this poem!!

on Oct. 13 2018 at 3:22 pm
williamgrantland, Columbia, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
“Injustice everywhere is a threat to justice everywhere.” Martin Luther King, Jr.
“Be yourself. Everyone else is already taken.” Unknown

wow! awesome job!!