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Sensitive Am I

August 30, 2009
By ariwrites94 GOLD, Deltona, Florida
ariwrites94 GOLD, Deltona, Florida
17 articles 4 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." ---Plato


Tears I cry are not tears at all
Dejection I feel has made me fall
I feel no wind, but yet chills occur
Hands pat my shoulders, but yet I feel no comfort
This vaporous state I've brought myself in
But nothing's pushed me, yet I begin
Big open fields, where sun does not shine
Quills I feel prick me from behind
Yet no matter where I turn, I'm always looking back
Not understanding myself, yet feeling bad
I lay in my room with this feeling of ennui
Staring at my wall with tears of despondency
As I watch my ceiling fan create circles of trust
I think of how I could not be the same, cause I've already given up
Tears I cry are not tears at all
They're regrettings of past actions I happen to recall
I feel mortification and I don't know why
I don't understand why they're not tears I cry
Or why dolor is a feeling that describes my life
Or how fast all those good days went by
I guess you could call this letting go
I guess you could call this an entangling hole
But I guess I'll never understand why
I'm trapped inside, but I've finally realized
That this is what I am, Sensitive Am I



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on Nov. 11 2009 at 6:23 pm
whisperingofdawn GOLD, Colorado City, Arizona
17 articles 12 photos 87 comments
amazing piece :)

i can deffinately relate to that. thought i was just being a cry baby...

SamSam SILVER said...
on Nov. 10 2009 at 10:57 pm
SamSam SILVER, Carrollton, Texas
5 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Take risks. if you win, you will be happy. if you lose, you will be wise.

Dont tell me the sky's the limit when there's footprints on the moon.

Live for the moments you can't put into words.

I really liked this poem, I'm not saying I don't:) I'll read that other one, too:D

on Nov. 10 2009 at 10:06 am
ariwrites94 GOLD, Deltona, Florida
17 articles 4 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." ---Plato

i have . . . have any of u checked out me "All you need is time" ballad yet? doesn't have da same ryhme scheme.

SamSam SILVER said...
on Nov. 9 2009 at 10:32 pm
SamSam SILVER, Carrollton, Texas
5 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Take risks. if you win, you will be happy. if you lose, you will be wise.

Dont tell me the sky's the limit when there's footprints on the moon.

Live for the moments you can't put into words.

Very good! I agree with the comment about rhyming, most of my poems don't rhyme, but in this case the rhyming and the rhyme scheme is perfect. Trying something new is always a good idea, though, so you might like trying something a little different. This poem is great, and i don't think anyone can say that it isnt. Very good.

on Nov. 9 2009 at 8:34 pm
literaryaddict PLATINUM, Albuquerque, New Mexico
23 articles 3 photos 157 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We're almost there and no where near it. All that matters is that we're going." Lorelai Gilmore, Gilmore Girls
"The whole theory of modern education is radically unsound." Lady Bracknell, The Importance of Being Earnest, Oscar Wilde

this is awesome. i love the line "tears i cry are not tears at all" its SO SO good!

on Nov. 9 2009 at 7:30 pm
freespirit94 GOLD, St. Louis, Missouri
11 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Sometimes people are beautiful. Not in their looks. Not in what they say. Just in what they are."
-Marcus Zusak

this is a really great poem. very inspiring! keep writing!!!

on Nov. 9 2009 at 5:46 pm
RitaChristine BRONZE, Metcalfe, Other
2 articles 0 photos 31 comments
Nice work. I read a few of your poems, and I notice that you lean towards a set rhyme scheme most of the time, like this one has. However, sometimes rhyme doesn't work, and can seem forced, or overly repetitive. I would encourage you to branch out and try writing without rhyme and see where it takes you. Never stop writing!

on Nov. 8 2009 at 9:27 pm
distant_dreamer GOLD, Belmont, New Hampshire
12 articles 6 photos 497 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a climb, but the view is great!"

Wow, that is an amazing poem!!! I love the feeling and emotion that you put in it, as I was reading this, I could feel it all pouring out into my heart! :) Great Job keep it up!!!!! :)

taylormade56 said...
on Nov. 8 2009 at 9:13 pm
This is a really really well written poem. It's incredible how many works you have posted on this site! That in itself is something to be proud of. Awesome awesome job.

on Nov. 8 2009 at 8:08 pm
crazyHchan SILVER, Nagoya, Other
7 articles 16 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be yourself, everyone else is taken... :)

Wow great poem! I think everyone at some point in their lives is able to relate to this, and that's one of the things that makes your poem so special :) If you have the time, could you check out some of my work? It would be very much appreciated.

Zero_K DIAMOND said...
on Nov. 1 2009 at 7:56 am
Zero_K DIAMOND, Moosic, Pennsylvania
83 articles 0 photos 435 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's no fun if you're not insane, otherwise you grow up to be an accountant." -Moi

I love this! Thanks for you comment on The Mirror! I read your profile, and I can relate. I wrote my first short story when I was five. It was about living ornaments that went around the tree and made conversation with eachother. I just looked at the original copy yesterday and realized that all my d's are capitalized and all my j's are backward! Great poem, bravo!

+++ZERO+++

on Oct. 30 2009 at 9:59 pm
Lovefairy SILVER, Westminster, Maryland
5 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Why so Serious? - The Joker

I like it! You do a very good job at expressing emotion.

on Oct. 29 2009 at 8:55 pm
wordweaver96 PLATINUM, Winchester, Kentucky
37 articles 2 photos 254 comments

Favorite Quote:
" It is not our abilities but our choices that show who we truly are. "
Albus Dumbledore


See, we really DON'T have anything to fear but fear itself!

i love this!

on Oct. 29 2009 at 4:16 pm
---Sixx--- PLATINUM, /, Other
26 articles 4 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"To see what a man is like, take a look at how he treats his inferiors, not his equals.\"

i can completely relate to this. i also think its cool how you used Delore, i actually just used that word in a poem and i didnt know anyone else knew what it meant(:

YayatheGreat said...
on Oct. 29 2009 at 2:11 pm
i really like this poem =]