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Detonate (Rondelet)

November 30, 2009
By Descant GOLD, Huntington Beach, California
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"A man's work is nothing but this slow trek to rediscover, through the detours of art, those two or three great and simple images in whose presence his heart first opened" –Albert Camus

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Shaking, burning,
Stand before the eyes of hundreds.
Shaking, burning
Notes send hissing from your churning
Flesh like fuses. Now! On their heads
Song bursts your chest, and to all weds
Shaking, burning.

The author's comments:
A second version of a previously submitted work, this time accurately following the form. I'd love to get feedback comparing the strengths and weaknesses of each version.
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