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Death's Eyes

March 11, 2010
By CountryGothic GOLD, Somersworth, New Hampshire
CountryGothic GOLD, Somersworth, New Hampshire
16 articles 2 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Once something has been said, it cannot be said in other words." -Aristotle


Staring into his eyes,
Almost completely black,
Hearing my hearts cries,
Waiting for the attack.

Almost completely black,
Around us is the night,
Waiting for the attack,
The one I would not fight.

Around us is the night,
Watching the beautiful creature,
The one I would not fight,
He owns not one ugly feature.

Watching the beautiful creature,
He leans in for a kiss,
He owns not one ugly feature,
For this I will miss.

He leans in for a kiss,
Hearing my hearts cries,
For this I will miss,
Staring into his eyes.


The author's comments:
This type of poem is called a pantoum...and yes it's about a vampire.

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on Jul. 25 2010 at 8:13 am
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
\"either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin

\"If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\"

\"If music be the food of love, play on.\"

wow i love your writing style!!! its so unique and interesting!!! i really love the effect of this poem-its sort of mysterious and cold but still so awesome!!! plus you picked the perfect pic. to go w/ it!! please check out some of my work it would mean a lot. I think that you might like 'stay for tomorrow' and 'words unspoken'. it would mean a lot if you would ckeck out my work!!:)

on Jun. 8 2010 at 6:37 pm
CountryGothic GOLD, Somersworth, New Hampshire
16 articles 2 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Once something has been said, it cannot be said in other words." -Aristotle

Thank you so much!

REMi93 GOLD said...
on Jun. 7 2010 at 11:20 pm
REMi93 GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Love Never Fails

I love this poem. It's cool how you repeat lines but it doesn't feel like repetition at all. It has a beautiful flow and serene power.

on Jun. 2 2010 at 9:56 pm
CountryGothic GOLD, Somersworth, New Hampshire
16 articles 2 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Once something has been said, it cannot be said in other words." -Aristotle

Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it!

on May. 25 2010 at 1:03 pm
chastity SILVER, Beckley, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
take me as i am or take me as i leave

wow this is so great!!! i wish i were ths good