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My Stupid Feelings

July 6, 2011
By Odessa_Sterling00 DIAMOND, No, Missouri
Odessa_Sterling00 DIAMOND, No, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
All gave some, some gave all. -War Veterans headstone.

Your eyes are like the dark pines on a Christmas tree.
Your hair is always perfect like a new penny.
Your hands are molded to fit mine perfectly like two puzzle pieces are formed to connect together.
When you hug me, I feel like a baby protected by Spiderman.
When you smile at me my heart turns into a butterfly with wing spasms.
When you left me, I felt like an elephant had stepped on my head.

The author's comments:
Similes and metaphors!

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on Jul. 21 2011 at 7:04 pm
cynthia.allen16 PLATINUM, Plesant Plains Ar, Arkansas
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Favorite Quote:
you never know what u have.. untill its gone

hi i liked your poem it was really great! :)

on Jul. 20 2011 at 6:35 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

This was creative and really nice. I especially liked, "When you left me, I felt like an elephant stepped on my head." (I don't know if that was exactly the wording; the comment box is blocking that line.) This wasn't too serious, but I liked it.

Molly11 SILVER said...
on Jul. 13 2011 at 9:14 pm
Molly11 SILVER, Boise, Idaho
5 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The minute you settle for less than you deserve, you get even less than you settled for." - Maureen Dowd

I really liked that you compared their hair to something round (a penny) and their eyes to something sharp and straight (pine needles). That's pretty cool. Actually, I liked the whole thing (esp Spiderman haha) except the puzzle piece simile felt kind of cliche. Good work!