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Change

June 30, 2011
By Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
9 articles 3 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything will be ok in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end."


I feel a gentle breeze on my face
as I quietly survey this place
so much has happened here
over the last few years
so much has changed
and yet this place is still the same.

It's like time vanished into thin air
I search for the times I knew
but I can't find them anywhere.

It seems like it was just yesterday
when we laughed and played
but now those days are gone
I am here alone, remembering and wondering
what will happen now
I feel as if I'm dreaming...



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on Dec. 28 2013 at 12:45 am
NaaThompson GOLD, Allston, Massachusetts
10 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you don't like someone's story, write your own. -Chinua Achebe

  I can actually relate to this. Longing for things to return to the way they were.  Nice work, Keep writing!!!

on Dec. 27 2013 at 1:22 pm
Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
9 articles 3 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything will be ok in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end."

Hey everyone, it's been a while so I don't know if this will show up in your notifications, but please go and check out some of my new work, like "Different this Time," and "Summer Bliss."  In return, I will check out some of yours! feedback for feedback! merry christmas and thanks for all of your support:)

on Dec. 27 2013 at 1:20 pm
Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
9 articles 3 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything will be ok in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end."

Hey Soulpoetry, please check out my new poems "different this time," "nightmare," or "summer bliss." I'll check out the work you'd like me to see too!

on Dec. 27 2013 at 1:19 pm
Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
9 articles 3 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything will be ok in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end."

Hey, thanks for your feedback! Please check out some of my new work, such as "Different This Time," and "Nightmare." In return, I will check out some of yours:)

on Dec. 4 2013 at 4:00 pm
LittleMissLostInParadise GOLD, Cumberland, Virginia
19 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We live in a strange bubble"
-Brian Molko

Very touching, great job!

on Aug. 3 2013 at 10:52 am
I_Love_To_Write BRONZE, New Delhi, Other
1 article 0 photos 11 comments
This is so good!! Your rhyme is just awesome  

on Jul. 12 2013 at 4:13 pm
Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
9 articles 3 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything will be ok in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end."

Hi SoulPoetry, thank you! I want to but I haven't been writing as much as I should so my work is rusty. I like your username!

on Jun. 28 2013 at 5:42 pm
SoulPoetry PLATINUM, Sierra Madre, California
29 articles 4 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I will work harder" (animal farm boxer the horse)

i really enjoyed this poem i love the emotion :) you should post more of your work  

on Jun. 26 2013 at 9:51 am
Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
9 articles 3 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything will be ok in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end."

Thank you everyone! It means alot! :) 

shy girl said...
on Sep. 12 2011 at 9:28 pm
Love it! I am going to post some on my blog that I wrote. They arn't proffesional like yours. lol. I will send you an email soon.

ams98 said...
on Sep. 2 2011 at 10:15 am
ams98, Brighton, Michigan
0 articles 0 photos 38 comments
Its REALLY prettyt:) I LOVE IT!! keep writing because you have a real gift:)

leafy said...
on Aug. 31 2011 at 9:37 am
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

Nce job, the only thing is....I want more! But seriously, you did a great job. And since you only have one piece here, you can just look at my "Posthumous" piece instead of both the ones asked earlier

Rayne GOLD said...
on Aug. 30 2011 at 11:02 am
Rayne GOLD, Chippewa Falls, Wisconsin
17 articles 0 photos 46 comments
I like it, but it is a bit short. Could use more detail and more to the store. But I like the feeling, I can relate!   

on Aug. 28 2011 at 10:24 am
DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
7 articles 6 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
The universe was exploding, each particle away from the next, hurtling us into dark and lonely space, eternally tearing us away from each other--child out of the womb, friend away from friend, moving from each other, each through his own pathway toward the goal-box of solitary death

Nice job! like thetruthawaits said, you really convey to your reader that there is so much more to the story of the poem. It keeps the reader interested, which is always awesome! Great job!

on Aug. 27 2011 at 11:10 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 351 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

I feel like there is so much more to the story. It definitely leaves me wondering what all it is, which is a good thing. I think you left yourself open to expanding the poem, which you could do but isn't necessary! This was great. I loved the way it flowed. i don't know if i like that the last line doesn't fit or if i don't like it. I think you could end it in a better way, it feels like it ends a bit suddenly. i really loved reading this honestly! :) hopefully you'll post more so that i can read more of your writing! Keep it coming! :)

msn9896 GOLD said...
on Aug. 27 2011 at 10:31 pm
msn9896 GOLD, Billings, Montana
11 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have my own particular sorrows, loves, delights; and you have yours. But sorrow, gladness, yearning, hope, love, belong to all of us, in all times and in all places. Music is the only means whereby we feel these emotions in their universality. ~H.A. Overstreet

I really liked the rythym of it :)

on Aug. 27 2011 at 12:19 am
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

"I feel as if I'm dreaming..." totally doesn't feel like it belongs in the poem- which is perfect! It wakes you up.

on Aug. 26 2011 at 7:27 pm
BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
5 articles 0 photos 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
The meaning of life is a question that you have already answered.

Great Job! This is a great poem. keep writing

on Aug. 26 2011 at 6:49 pm
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
41 articles 0 photos 650 comments

Favorite Quote:
‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

The poem is good and as relateable as it is. Kudos on the similes nd keep writing... :)

on Aug. 26 2011 at 4:50 pm
ChocoMint SILVER, Bloomington, Indiana
7 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is like swallowing hot chocolate before it has cooled off. It takes you by surprise at first, but keeps you warm for a long time." - Anonymous

"Love starts with a smile, grows with a kiss and ends with a tear." - Anonymous

Wonderful word choice! You can definitely feel the way the person expresses toward the situation. They have a feeling of  sadness because of change, but also the acceptance of it happening.  Good work!