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Need Love?

December 31, 2008
By carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
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See it but never feel it.
Get close, only to push it away.
“Don’t know what you’ve got til it’s gone”
Epitome of my life.
What is wrong with me?
What makes me so un-lovable?
Can someone remove this defective sign from my forehead,
And replace it with a kiss.
I want more than mediocre.
I want someone to miss.
Do I ask for too much?
Are my requirements unachievable?
My heart remains unconquered, unattained.
I’m tired of fairy tale endings,
Silly thoughts put in my head by unrealistic, but hopelessly believable movies.
They are all the same.
Girl meets boy. Girl messes it up. Boy forgives girl.
Happily Ever After.
At least they let on that relationships have problems.
I want raw, unrelenting love.
The real deal.
No movie, novel, or episode of “Sex and the City” could ever touch.
Left alone, drowning in thoughts,
Who else in the world could need love,
Like I need love?

© Rebecca S., Marblehead, MA

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Shel-Bells SILVER said...
on Feb. 5 2010 at 2:13 pm
Shel-Bells SILVER, Middletown, Delaware
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wow ! im so blown away ! this is like ahmayzing , it make sme feel as if im not alone ! I LOVE IT ! :) keep writing !
josh225 said...
on Feb. 2 2010 at 7:54 pm
I enjoyed reading this poem and agreed with everything you said.
Rabaya GOLD said...
on Jan. 30 2010 at 12:56 pm
Rabaya GOLD, Jamaica, New York
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This poem is so unbelievably amazing! Wow. Check out my work if you get the chance!
fiveinside2 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 28 2010 at 9:10 pm
fiveinside2 BRONZE, Chapel Hill, North Carolina
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I meant perfect xD
fiveinside2 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 28 2010 at 9:10 pm
fiveinside2 BRONZE, Chapel Hill, North Carolina
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I really, really like this! The way you phrase your ideas is perect. :) Just thought: the style almost mkes me think this would also work in paragraph form as a sort of mixture of prose and poetry, like lyrical flash fiction maybe? It seems right on the line between the two and could probably go either way. just a thouht. :)
PoeticTwirler PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 28 2010 at 6:22 pm
PoeticTwirler PLATINUM, Wantagh, New York
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" If I has to chose between loving you and breathing , I would use my last breath to say I love you...."

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Just want to let you know this is amazing and that I love it! i think this topic your really strong in
calephchad BRONZE said...
on Jan. 28 2010 at 2:57 pm
calephchad BRONZE, Guin, Alabama
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Honestly, this poem should be commented more than "Daddy's Womb". This poem is by for better. I'm sick of looking at that half-crapped poem sitting up there at the most commented and top voted poem on here. It just disgustes me. This poem at least deserves the credit. This poem is really good. Check out some of my work if you would like.
Sync. GOLD said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 10:04 pm
Sync. GOLD, Diamond Back, California
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I love this:)

and id apprecitae it if you would take a look at my work at help me out a litte aha thanks:)
MojoJojo said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 7:54 pm
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Awesome work dude
PeaveLoveMe SILVER said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 7:45 pm
PeaveLoveMe SILVER, Deland, Florida
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OMG love it! plz plz plz read some of my work it's horrible compared to yours but...at least read it plz? thanks! (:
Mostly_Dead said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 7:41 pm
Mostly_Dead, San Jose, California
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A little old drama with a modern twist. I like.
andshesfearless GOLD said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 6:57 pm
andshesfearless GOLD, West Harrison, New York
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when the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know peace.
-jimi hendrix-

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wooahhh i likkee this!
LuLu95 PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 5:48 pm
LuLu95 PLATINUM, Denver, Colorado
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Truly wonderful poem :) i thought it was absolutely fantastic! you have a great gift, and i hope that you check out some of my stuff
carijoy SILVER said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 4:26 pm
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
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I completely understand. :)
SunbearGirl SILVER said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 3:47 pm
SunbearGirl SILVER, Keller, Texas
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I do think it is very real, and I like that. I just... didn't really like reading it, if that makes sense.
cookies said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 2:39 pm
That was so awsome. you are a true poet. I write poetry as well. would you like to read one?
carijoy SILVER said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 1:43 pm
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
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Thank you for your honesty. I truly appreciate your feedback.

I know my poem is different than most of my other poems and most poetry people have read, but my purpose in writing this was to let people in to my mind and my heart, both which I believe to lack structure.

"Whiney and naive..." I think that basically sums up at least one period in our lives as teenagers, we all go through times when we are naive, and it seems the only way to let it out is to whine. I do not really see it as whining though, more like questioning, the questioning of life and how that causes us to mature and grow up.

But that is just how I see it.
valley101 said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 11:09 am
good poem i liked
SunbearGirl SILVER said...
on Jan. 26 2010 at 6:30 pm
SunbearGirl SILVER, Keller, Texas
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Honestly, I think this is kind of whiney and naive. It's too... vernacular sounding. Like, you're just talking, not writing poetry.
Dani_42 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 26 2010 at 11:24 am
Dani_42 BRONZE, Uhrichsville, Ohio
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God gave us two ears to hear, two eyes to see and two hands to hold. But why did God give us only one heart? Because he wants us to find the other one.

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this is so good...keep writing