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Need Love?

December 31, 2008
By carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments

See it but never feel it.
Get close, only to push it away.
“Don’t know what you’ve got til it’s gone”
Epitome of my life.
What is wrong with me?
What makes me so un-lovable?
Can someone remove this defective sign from my forehead,
And replace it with a kiss.
I want more than mediocre.
I want someone to miss.
Do I ask for too much?
Are my requirements unachievable?
My heart remains unconquered, unattained.
I’m tired of fairy tale endings,
Silly thoughts put in my head by unrealistic, but hopelessly believable movies.
They are all the same.
Girl meets boy. Girl messes it up. Boy forgives girl.
Happily Ever After.
At least they let on that relationships have problems.
I want raw, unrelenting love.
The real deal.
No movie, novel, or episode of “Sex and the City” could ever touch.
Left alone, drowning in thoughts,
Who else in the world could need love,
Like I need love?

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LIKEwhoaa GOLD said...
on Jul. 13 2009 at 1:43 am
LIKEwhoaa GOLD, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
The important thing is this: To be able at any moment to sacrifice what we are for what we could become.
-Charles DuBois

wow this is super deep, i love how it completely defies the cliche love poem of love at first sight blah blah really is more like reality. and the rhyme scheme is genius:) keep it up! ohh and check out my work:)

on Jul. 13 2009 at 1:02 am
xXFadedFlowerXx GOLD, Roy, Utah
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I love your poem, I've felt this way countless times.

hellogirl GOLD said...
on Jul. 13 2009 at 12:08 am
hellogirl GOLD, La Habra, California
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I really liked your poem it truly seems like what i have

felt before along with my friends i guess thats how everyone feels sometimes when they are in love or want to fall in love.

on Jul. 12 2009 at 2:10 pm
poetic_natural GOLD, Jefferson, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"you know you're in love because you can't fall asleep, because reality is finally better than your dreams"

i really like this poem. Yeah i know what you mean by not being loved,I always have issues with guys no tlikinhg me, so this poem totally relates to my life keep writing

JaseC GOLD said...
on Jul. 10 2009 at 9:04 am
JaseC GOLD, Granbury, Texas
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being lonely is bad you figure that out after a while but that's usually too late and nothing is worse than being too late.

on Jul. 9 2009 at 8:07 pm
Edwin Castillo BRONZE, Houston, Texas
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i felt this way so many times. good work. my poems suck in comparison. this is straight from the broken heart.

on Jun. 25 2009 at 5:54 pm
myluvsong182<3 BRONZE, Harmony, New Jersey
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FINALY someone who gives a new definition of love without being exactly like every cheesey sitcom and movie out there. lol :) I loved this! it ttly describes me lately, i got alot going ya kno...keep it up!:)

on Jun. 24 2009 at 12:28 am
JJK#5315 BRONZE, Koror, Other
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this is really good :D

on Jun. 16 2009 at 7:23 pm
AJ Krzysko BRONZE, Tower Lakes, Illinois
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it is definitely a very well written poem but kinda cliche by pointing out all the cliches

RiaRen SILVER said...
on Jun. 8 2009 at 3:59 pm
RiaRen SILVER, New Bothwell, Other
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hey, u no i agree that louv is often overused in literature and all but i think this poem is great. it isn't as mushy gushy as normal luv poems and i really appreciate that. i like how u, urself commented on the fact that u weren't trying to cover luv entirely, but just the way you feel, and isn't that all anybody can do? keep writing cuz u've got a talent that needs to be seen!!

on Jun. 8 2009 at 3:45 pm
Zachary12220 GOLD, Hamburg, New York
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on Jun. 5 2009 at 10:21 am
Callum Mcleod BRONZE, Glasgow, Other
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I don't speak for everyone clearly in writing this, but in what way is this a poem as opposed to just gushing ideas onto paper? What ever happened to the concept of "Showing, not telling"? I feel that if your themes had been conveyed in metaphor, that would have been a more interesting poem. But this...I recommend you try and rework this poem into something more metaphorical. Perhaps surrounding a paticular moment you feel is crucial to the themes in this work?

on May. 29 2009 at 11:22 pm
Daniel Cornish BRONZE, Salem, Connecticut
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wow this poem is absolutely beautiful, your an artist of emotions and words, you really expressed something in a genuine way.

And i really hope you will receive that love you desire

Ryan M. said...
on May. 29 2009 at 10:26 pm
Epic. And so true

flower child said...
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on May. 29 2009 at 7:44 pm
HeavenCooley GOLD, Stillwater, Oklahoma
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wow i love this. it actually brings me to reality with love. i never ereally thought it that way. all tho it happens to me i jus kinda let everything go and keep trying. wow its really good!!!:P

on May. 28 2009 at 10:19 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

wow! this is very good..i felt the emotion you put into this piece.very talented you are! should be published!! good job!! keep it up!!

~~~~~~~~please check out my work if you have time, thank you!

on May. 28 2009 at 7:07 pm
LMurf889 BRONZE, St. Charles, Illinois
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I'm usually not a fan of the mushy, love poems. Something about them being a little cliche. But this one is fantastic. Totally changed my perspective of "love poems", it's so modern and kept my attention from start to finish.

on May. 27 2009 at 6:31 am
Faeriedustygirl GOLD, Manhattan, Kansas
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I must say, its well put together, and I like how its not an ABAB rhyme scheme. Very mature, and i enjoyed it.

two thumbs up!

on May. 22 2009 at 7:00 pm
BrittanyB SILVER, Vass, North Carolina
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That's really good!! I hope to read more in the future!