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heart attack

April 1, 2012
By gb12197 PLATINUM, Bridgeport, Pennsylvania
gb12197 PLATINUM, Bridgeport, Pennsylvania
20 articles 3 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"next time you feel like a failure, think about how you are alive, and you have the opportunity to be successful."

"i don't have an attitude, i have a personality you can't handle"

"i am weird"


I told you to be careful as you walked on the floor boards of my heart.
I told you they were weak, and easy to fall apart.
You did not listen and it only took a stomp or two,
But before I knew it everything fell through.

When you wanted me I told you it was a mistake,
But my heart was so vulnerable and easy to take.
Now I know to never let myself be so weak.
I know it will be hard next time we have to speak.

I feel so stupid for even giving you a chance,
And letting you spin me around in your little dance.
Now I just feel sick.
I don’t understand why you did this.

I hate feeling bad for myself,
So feeling like this is personal hell.
I really want to hurt you back,
But being near you might give me a heart attack.


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on Apr. 14 2012 at 1:52 pm
snowleopard100 PLATINUM, New York City, New York
33 articles 1 photo 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, but I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."

Okay so I really loved the beginning of the poem. The dea of walking on somebody's heart was soo unique and intriguing that I was entranced. But as it went on the imagery became more literal and less exciting. At certain points it was even a little cliched. But overall nice work and keep it up!!!!

on Apr. 11 2012 at 6:35 pm
eternal_sunshine SILVER, Minnetonka, Minnesota
8 articles 0 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
Laugh, and the world laughs with you;
Weep, and you weep alone.
For the sad old earth must borrow it's mirth,
But has trouble enough of its own.

This was also extremely relatable for me. I think a lot of people have that one person who they completely regret letting into their lives. This reminded me of mine. It was your personal story, but yet I related to it. Your rhymes flowed well and it was easy to read. Lovely poem.

on Apr. 10 2012 at 11:59 pm
gb12197 PLATINUM, Bridgeport, Pennsylvania
20 articles 3 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"next time you feel like a failure, think about how you are alive, and you have the opportunity to be successful."

"i don't have an attitude, i have a personality you can't handle"

"i am weird"

thanks for the feedback, i am really glad you liked it.

on Apr. 10 2012 at 8:42 pm
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
16 articles 0 photos 98 comments
i like it! its very similar to one of my poems A Map to Darkness. i like how ur not afraid to admit u were wrong. i also like how ur brutally honest with th fact u wish u could hurt him back. i think we all go through those moments. dont worry u will find someone better !