this is good. you kind of have the same style as me. soo i like your style.  

nice poem! =) Love the way you write. It makes people think about what they're doing and what they should be doing. It just is all really cool. Good work =)

stars its not so hard. just relax and let it flow. and is what comes out of it. if it does not work the frist time try again and continue until it works for you.

I really like your writing Gage! It's beautiful and well thought out. I wish I could write like you! ^_^ Keep writing, yeah?

Gage, I enjoy the things you write about. They are always deep, thoughy provoking, bending the human nature for violence and selfishness. Your poems akways carry a message, and these are powerful words which coiney your message. "You may shed a single tear But remember another Is shedding many more" a great introduction, this captivated me, as soon as I read it, I wanted know what else was in store during the poem. In this writing, it seems you talk of fighting. Whether its wars, verbal abuse, physical abuse, you say in your poem no. Think, and question yourselves, if we, us humans, are hurting others, then arent we ultimately hurting ourselvws.? We are all alike, race, religion, orientation shouldn't matter. Though, I believe this npiem may be religious, but its great that i can think of it more as an eye opener for everyone, and the worlds issues. As aforementioned in previous comments the beat gets a bit off, but nevertheless great and powerful words. Though provoking, eccentrick and creative, i greatly enjoy reading your work. Keep it coming ;D

I really like what you are trying to convey through this poem... some of the beat and grammar is slightly off... but the overall feel of the poem is good!

I love the message of this poem..just seems the flow is a little bit off! Just my thought! Great work tho!