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Past the Mask

January 28, 2010
By Lynne03 SILVER, Greeley, Colorado
Lynne03 SILVER, Greeley, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"When you feel like giving up, remember why you held on for so long in the first place." -Someone


So many years of silence,
eat away at thee.
He can only hope that one day,
from all these burdens he'll be set free.

His mask seems to work,
far too well.
At this point,
one too many times he's fell.

But no one can see past him,
past the mask.
They are all to clueless,
to even think to ask.

To ask if anything is wrong.

If they would only ask,
then they would see.
That he's all but fine,
and far from free.


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on Aug. 14 2010 at 5:57 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

Good job with the rhyming here. I really enjoyed the flow, except with the first stanza. I don't know what the deal is with you and thees (I think you did this once before) but I think it really lacks that emotional edge to it, and sucks the life out of a poem. Find more modern relatable words or this sounds more like an odd cross between modern and Shakespearean poetry.