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why wont you mend my heart

March 29, 2010
By Hexenbiest SILVER, Winona, Ohio
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Hexenbiest SILVER, Winona, Ohio
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&quot;Hope is the worst of evils, for it prolongs the torments of man.&quot;<br /> &quot;You don&#039;t really understand human nature unless you know why a child on a merry-go-round will wave at his parents every time around -- and why his parents will always wave back.&quot;<br /> Life is a game, play it....Life is too precious, do not destroy it.&quot;<br /> &quot;Experience is a brutal teacher, but you learn. My God, do you learn.&quot;

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why wont you mend my heart after you broke it in two
why wont you end the never ending silence even though its going through and though
their is a reason why i cant say your the one, the reason is because im scared
i am scared to let anyone in, to let my guard down because i will feel bared
im sorry i cannot say it ,i wont because you just proved that you arent,

© Michelle B., Blairsville, GA

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i felt this way after i got my heart broken because i wouldnt say i love you
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CarrieAnn13 GOLD said...
on Dec. 17 2011 at 8:09 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
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This is a really emotional poem, but I have a bit of criticism.

1.  Your grammar.  'their' instead of 'there', no apostrophes, no punctuation, no proper capitalization...I know this is a free verse poem, but that really annoys me.

2.  I think shorter lines and maybe splitting this up into verses would really help its appearance and rhythm.

Other than that, great work!

Mudder_Hacky SILVER said...
on Aug. 19 2011 at 10:43 am
Mudder_Hacky SILVER, Fowlerville, Michigan
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btw, nice picture choice (: heck, even just nice picture...
Mudder_Hacky SILVER said...
on Aug. 19 2011 at 10:42 am
Mudder_Hacky SILVER, Fowlerville, Michigan
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aw, don't say you got your heart broken. that makes it sound like u think it's your fault.. and my guess is that it's not. Not wanting to say "I love you" prematurely is not at all a bad thing; in fact, it's completely understandable...
SilentSerenity BRONZE said...
on Sep. 23 2010 at 9:22 am
SilentSerenity BRONZE, Brookfield, Ohio
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Very nice poem, i hope you write more, MyFallenAngel.
HeatherBee BRONZE said...
on May. 24 2010 at 8:22 am
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
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awww, well u wrote a greatt poem. its beautiful