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Melting Like Snow

July 4, 2010
By Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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&quot;If you love life, don&#039;t waste time, for time is what life is<br /> made up of.&quot;<br /> <br /> -- Bruce Lee

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The anticipation is building
Until my eyes can drink you in -
To end the dehydration
And force these cracked lips into a grin.

Thoughts of you are my life-rafts
In this unforgiving sea,
That tries to pull me under
But you won't allow to succeed.

A glimpse of you is all I need
To gain consciousness again,
But your touch would bring me back to life -
An electric jolt against bare skin.

How or why you affect me this way,
I doubt I'll ever know -
But I'm glad it's you who keeps me
From melting away like the snow.

© Kim B., Marblehead, MA

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I hope you find some kind of meaning in this poem even though it may be hard to relate to - I wrote this one more for me.
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This article has 12 comments.

Alcanno DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 28 2010 at 9:00 am
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you love life, don&#039;t waste time, for time is what life is<br /> made up of.&quot;<br /> <br /> -- Bruce Lee

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Thank you so much - I've been using imagery a lot lately, and find that its a really easy way to make your piece more relatable. I'm glad you connetcted. Thanks!
Virabbit SILVER said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 8:05 pm
Virabbit SILVER, Bellingham, Washington
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Kiss me and you will see how important I am.

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Wow, I really like the imagery in the first stanza, with the dehydrated eyes and stuff.  There's a couple little grammar errors, but nothing big or distracting.

I see how it's a more personal poem, but I really connected with it. The language you used was really powerful!

Alcanno DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 26 2010 at 6:14 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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&quot;If you love life, don&#039;t waste time, for time is what life is<br /> made up of.&quot;<br /> <br /> -- Bruce Lee

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Ahw, thank you so much for your encouraging words! It means a lot :)
Drizzle29 SILVER said...
on Aug. 26 2010 at 12:42 am
Drizzle29 SILVER, Norwalk, Connecticut
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Life has taught us that love does not consist in gazing at each other, but in looking outward together in the same direction. ~Antoine de Saint-Exup&eacute;ry, Wind, Sand and Stars, 1939, translated from French by Lewis Galanti&egrave;re

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flawless. i have no idea how you make each poem you write so perfect. i think this one is my favorite though :D
Alcanno DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 13 2010 at 10:08 am
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you love life, don&#039;t waste time, for time is what life is<br /> made up of.&quot;<br /> <br /> -- Bruce Lee

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Thank you thank you! :)
Alcanno DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 13 2010 at 10:07 am
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you love life, don&#039;t waste time, for time is what life is<br /> made up of.&quot;<br /> <br /> -- Bruce Lee

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Yay! I'm glad you can relate and thanks for the comment!
FantasyWriter17 said...
on Aug. 8 2010 at 9:25 pm
FantasyWriter17, Rialto, California
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TO THE WORLD U MAY BE ONE PERSON BUT TO ONE PERSON U MAY BE THE WORLD!:)

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like it very beautiful i can relate with my bf
aishia_duh BRONZE said...
on Aug. 7 2010 at 11:05 pm
aishia_duh BRONZE, Columbus, Ohio
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awh i really like this...i really like the ending :)
ellyncannon PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 6 2010 at 8:59 am
ellyncannon PLATINUM, Mexia, Texas
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That which we persist in doing becomes easier, not that the task itself has become easier, but that our ability to perform it has improved.<br /> Ralph Waldo Emerson<br /> &lt;3

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hee hee I know what it means... After all I'M the one who pointed it out to you... hah! Love your work!!! Keep it up!
Alcanno DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 1 2010 at 8:42 am
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you love life, don&#039;t waste time, for time is what life is<br /> made up of.&quot;<br /> <br /> -- Bruce Lee

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:D The first verse has some hidden meaning - kinda a play on words. You'd only catch it if you knew me personally. Just saying :)
Alcanno DIAMOND said...
on Jul. 29 2010 at 4:54 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you love life, don&#039;t waste time, for time is what life is<br /> made up of.&quot;<br /> <br /> -- Bruce Lee

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Thanks so much! I was worried I jumped around too much... Thanks for the positive feedback! And I'll definitely check you out!
bound4life4ever PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 29 2010 at 1:42 pm
bound4life4ever PLATINUM, Jamaica, New York
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omg! this was fabulous!!!!!!!!!!!!! i read one of ur other peoms b4 nd i rote a reminder 2 check out the rest of ur work so here i am looking at it all. I LOVE THIS ONE O MUCH CUZ I NOE XACTLY HOW U FEEL! check out my work if u wanna.. keep writing !!!!!!