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The Swimmer

July 12, 2010
By teenbookworm14 PLATINUM, Plainfield, Connecticut
teenbookworm14 PLATINUM, Plainfield, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"Nothing gold can stay" -Robert Frost


she jumps
nothing can conceal the thrill
bursting inside of her like an
over-filled water balloon,
that she gets when in a competition
win, win, win
is all she is thinking,
as her heart beats faster than
ever before
one breathe
a loud noise fills the air
sploosh, smack, splash,
she is in the water
the cold shock is lost on her,
she is thinking too hard about nothing
everything feels so
dreamlike underwater,
but wait,
i have a race to win
she says
one stroke after another
pushing on,
not caring about fatigue,
enjoying this competitive state of mind,
and the dreamless one
where her body is controlled
by one word,
swim


The author's comments:
I wanted to get a point across about how most swimmers feel when they are going into a competition.

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on Aug. 29 2010 at 12:43 am
teenbookworm14 PLATINUM, Plainfield, Connecticut
41 articles 0 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing gold can stay" -Robert Frost

thank you SO much kingfan! your feedback really means everything to me. ill comment on some of your work too :) keep writing!

on Aug. 28 2010 at 8:16 am
Kingfan123 GOLD, Charles Town, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Life moves pretty fast, if you don't stop to look around once in awhile, you could miss it."
and
"I'd rather stand alone for the right reasons than stand popular for the wrong."

Let me just say-You're an awesome poet! Loved this piece really expressed what a swimmer feels! Well done!!!