Salty Grave | Teen Ink
  1. Home
  2. Poetry
  3. Free Verse
  4. Salty Grave

Salty Grave

August 4, 2010
By alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
More by this author
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

View profile

Fire.
Burning inside me.
Deep fire.
Cold fire.
Watery fire.
Lungs burning.
Can't breathe.
Reaching out,
and
feeling...
nothingness.
Panic.
Lungs sigh of relief.
Bubbles making their way
up...
to where I should go...
but can't.
Instead,
I make my way
down down...
Salty tears
mixing
with salty ocean
mixing
with my
salty grave.

© Kristy H., Willow City, ND

The author's comments:
Drowning in saddness and tears and helplessness.
Post a comment
Submit your own

Similar Articles

Previous Next
Poetry
Solar Lies
By Rachel Bellah BRONZE
Seattle, Washington
Rachel Bellah BRONZE, Seattle, Washington
4 articles 0 photos 1 comment
View profile
Poetry
Lightning
By Rachel Bellah BRONZE
Seattle, Washington
Rachel Bellah BRONZE, Seattle, Washington
4 articles 0 photos 1 comment
View profile
Poetry
My New Beginning
By delaney95 GOLD
St. Charles, Missouri
delaney95 GOLD, St. Charles, Missouri
11 articles 5 photos 5 comments
View profile
Poetry
Breathing
By costarican93 GOLD
Washington, Louisiana
costarican93 GOLD, Washington, Louisiana
14 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;The city looks so pretty do you want to burn it with me?&quot;- Hollywood Undead

View profile
Poetry
The Voice
By BreLee SILVER
Sula, Montana
BreLee SILVER, Sula, Montana
7 articles 0 photos 0 comments
View profile
Poetry
Nothing to say
By niceenouf PLATINUM
Garfield, New Jersey
niceenouf PLATINUM, Garfield, New Jersey
26 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
&quot;As we move on, you forget, we both move on, with no regret.&quot;

View profile

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 12 comments.

alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Oct. 3 2010 at 5:45 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

View profile
Awwww!!! OMG! You like so totally made my day :))))) now i'm all smiley! I'm sooo glad you liked it Ellyn! Thank you super super much! :DDD
ellyncannon PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 3 2010 at 12:22 pm
ellyncannon PLATINUM, Mexia, Texas
29 articles 0 photos 204 comments

Favorite Quote:
That which we persist in doing becomes easier, not that the task itself has become easier, but that our ability to perform it has improved.<br /> Ralph Waldo Emerson<br /> &lt;3

View profile
ok. this is- i cant get over how flawlessly you've portrayed this emotion. it's beautifually tragic. Really great work! :)
alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Oct. 1 2010 at 4:09 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

View profile
Awww! :) Thanks! I'm super happy you like it and that means a LOT to me! :D
Alcanno DIAMOND said...
on Sep. 30 2010 at 8:46 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;If you love life, don&#039;t waste time, for time is what life is<br /> made up of.&quot;<br /> <br /> -- Bruce Lee

View profile
I love this. It is written SO well and the flow and word choice are perfect. And the quote makes it easy for me to relate to the whole thing. Great work :)
alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Sep. 21 2010 at 10:03 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

View profile
Thank you so so much! That means a lot to me :)
CiCiJoLee BRONZE said...
on Sep. 20 2010 at 5:49 pm
CiCiJoLee BRONZE, Moorestown, New Jersey
2 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
confucius mixes logic with poetic phrases. His quotes are like poem&lt;3

View profile
this poem is really pretty..the idea is sad but its written so elegantly:)) i especially like the ending "salty tears-mixing-with salty ocean-mixing-with my-salty grave" really great:)
alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 30 2010 at 4:16 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

View profile
Ok I will and thank you! And feel free to check out some more of my work if ya haven't!
Kaptain SILVER said...
on Aug. 30 2010 at 12:19 pm
Kaptain SILVER, Dubai, Other
7 articles 0 photos 20 comments
View profile

good work!

 

Do go through mine if u have the time.. dont forget to rate and comment :)

alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 29 2010 at 4:55 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

View profile
Haha! 'Eep' is what i say when i get excited sometimes i dont know how i started saying that though! hahahaha
Thesilentraven PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 29 2010 at 4:30 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;il piu nell&#039; uno,&quot; (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)<br /> <br /> &quot;Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality&quot; ~Emily Dickinson<br /> <br /> &quot;The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain&quot; <br /> ~Kahlil Gibran

View profile
I'd love if you commented on my work! I am unsure of the word 'eep' though.
alanacarlene DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 29 2010 at 4:23 pm
alanacarlene DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
55 articles 15 photos 592 comments

Favorite Quote:
Silence screams too honestly and loudly.<br /> -Alex (aka GangstaEyes)<br /> Freedom is the freedom to say that two plus two equals four.<br /> -Winston Smith &#039;1984&#039;<br /> Don&#039;t go wishin&#039; your life away...<br /> -Daddy S2<br /> &quot;What a drag it was to be limited by reality.&quot;

View profile
Eep! Thank you so much! I'm glad you like it! :) :D I'll check out some of your work!
Thesilentraven PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 29 2010 at 2:14 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1632 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;il piu nell&#039; uno,&quot; (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)<br /> <br /> &quot;Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality&quot; ~Emily Dickinson<br /> <br /> &quot;The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain&quot; <br /> ~Kahlil Gibran

View profile
A very well written poem. It illustrates very well the desperate feeling of 'drowning.' It makes a great metaphor, and I LOVE the title. Great job.