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Dare il tuo amore {Forbidden Love}

January 28, 2011
By anisanasir_11 PLATINUM, Orlando, Other
anisanasir_11 PLATINUM, Orlando, Other
23 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
All that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream. -Edgar Allan Poe<br /> ~&quot;Paper is more patient than people,&quot;~Anne Frank<br /> &quot;Inspiration from the heart is written in the dark.&quot;~Anisa Nasir


It was forever a crime..
Their love deepened on a thin line.
Extinguishing the light
OF the Night..

Then came a last evening..
When dawn approached.
Crashing down their love came..
Dying out.

Forbidden to be they were..
But who would have thought.
It come to all odds.

Lying in a bed of roses and thorns.
Grasping to what was left..
There she sat grieving…..mourning.
Over you in silent death..

All their dreams shattered.
All their matters scattered..
Leaving that faithful girl empty handed...
Her love has been stranded..

Giving up she shall not..
Carrying their secrets to her grave.
To never be caught....
And to then be enslaved.

By what she gave...
Later will she know that her sins.
Will not be saved..


You think this is the end. Do you not?
Well wrong you are.
She stood their wallowing in the shadows..
Giving it one last shot..
She fought for all..This time not to fall..

She found salvation in all her worries..
As she was giving what she wanted all along..
A chance to be herself..
On her own........

The author's comments:
This piece came to me through dream. I dreamed about the story and brought it out through a poem. I like this piece a lot because it spoke to me.

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Coffee BRONZE said...
on Feb. 16 2011 at 5:52 pm
Coffee BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Your Face.

I thought it was a great poem!! I would give you advice, but i can't think of much, and i don't know that much about poems and stuff so i don't think i would be the best person to get advice from anyway haha

on Feb. 16 2011 at 12:58 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck<br /> <br /> In three words i can sum up everything I&#039;ve learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost<br /> <br /> Live, Love, Laugh - ______<br /> <br /> Hope, Love, breathe &lt;3 - Me

I really like it. The poem is really soft and meaningful except the line "All their matters scattered" I don't really like, I think it ruins the mood of the poem but otherwise it's perfect!!


on Feb. 16 2011 at 7:11 am
anisanasir_11 PLATINUM, Orlando, Other
23 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
All that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream. -Edgar Allan Poe<br /> ~&quot;Paper is more patient than people,&quot;~Anne Frank<br /> &quot;Inspiration from the heart is written in the dark.&quot;~Anisa Nasir

Thanks so much :) I am open to constructive criticism anytime. Thanks again ;)) 

Katsa08 SILVER said...
on Feb. 16 2011 at 7:07 am
Katsa08 SILVER, Sidney, Iowa
5 articles 0 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Don&#039;t take yourself so seriously, no one else does.&quot;<br /> &quot;What others think of me is none of my business.&quot;

Nisirocks: love the poem and the message in it, but, if it were me, I'd like to get a little constructive criticism so, here goes....

1. I know its Free Verse, but some consistency in some of the lines would really draw the reader in.

2. Your flow is really nice and interesting, but I think its on the border between interesting and unusual, and sometimes that drives people away.

 

Hope this helped! You did an amazing job! :)


on Feb. 15 2011 at 5:54 pm
anisanasir_11 PLATINUM, Orlando, Other
23 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
All that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream. -Edgar Allan Poe<br /> ~&quot;Paper is more patient than people,&quot;~Anne Frank<br /> &quot;Inspiration from the heart is written in the dark.&quot;~Anisa Nasir

Thanks btw i love your story it was amazing!

on Feb. 15 2011 at 5:50 pm
DaughteroftheTrumpet BRONZE, East Aurora, New York
2 articles 2 photos 214 comments

Favorite Quote:
Washington Irving once said &ldquo;There is sacredness in tears. They are not the mark of weakness, but of power. They are messengers of overwhelming grief and of unspeakable love.&rdquo;

wow. Of all the poetry i have  read, this is certianly some of the best. it would totally go with Carrie underwood's just a dream:) great job:)