A Four Leaf Clover | Teen Ink

A Four Leaf Clover

June 13, 2011
By BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
42 articles 11 photos 333 comments

A field of green
Through which I run
And laugh
And scream for pure joy
A field of clovers
Whose lobes
Number four

Finally
I can run
No more
My throat
And mouth
Dry
And cracked

But as I fall
To my knees
Upon
The soft green velvet
I smile still
I pluck a clover
And I see
The sorrows
Even a clover
Has
Bleed
Into thin air
Leaving naught
But ruddy gold

Any other day
I would not stop to wonder
I would gather up
Every clover
There has ever been
But today…
Today is different
Today
I marvel



Similar Articles

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 23 comments.


on Sep. 24 2011 at 7:34 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1646 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

Wow, the imagery in here is beautiful!  It's a simple poem, but it flows well and I like the idea.  Excellent work; I have no criticism!

on Sep. 17 2011 at 12:37 am
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
0 articles 0 photos 356 comments

Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

You have one of the most unique ways of desribing things. It's amazing. Your poem flows beautifully , and your eloquence is right on the dot. You create marvelous imagery through this. Really , fantastic job!

Dark_Mind GOLD said...
on Sep. 11 2011 at 6:02 pm
Dark_Mind GOLD, Little Rock, Arkansas
11 articles 0 photos 67 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sounds like a Personal Problem."

Its a very lovely poem. It does make me think of how we can find beauty in simple things. Just marvoulous this poem is. Great job.

on Sep. 2 2011 at 6:13 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Poetically sweet, savored, each word a lemon drop on the tongue.

on Aug. 12 2011 at 7:59 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 457 comments
It would still need to be bled.... Maybe if you try reading it out loud... Are you sure you're pronouncing it right?

on Aug. 11 2011 at 6:31 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
42 articles 11 photos 333 comments
Thanks! :D

on Aug. 10 2011 at 5:58 pm
HannSawyer15 BRONZE, North Brunswick, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 107 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I say... lets speak it. Lets fight it. Lets write it. There's nothing to hold on to if it's already gone."

You're really good with wording things... this poem really made me think and I really loved it. Great job and keep writing! :)

on Aug. 7 2011 at 1:58 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
42 articles 11 photos 333 comments
Maybe it will make more sense in sentence form. "I pluck a clover and I see the sorrows even a clover has bleed into thin air."

on Aug. 4 2011 at 11:13 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 457 comments
But the "has bleed" there don't make any sense. It's not proper grammar...

on Aug. 4 2011 at 10:59 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
42 articles 11 photos 333 comments
What I'm trying to say in that bit is how even a clover has some bad things in it's life, but when I plucked it they all went away.

on Aug. 4 2011 at 10:08 pm
Raytheraym PLATINUM, Belton, Missouri
47 articles 35 photos 457 comments
Very nicely done! It really should be bled. Or "...even a clover bleeds into..." without the "has". :)

on Aug. 2 2011 at 9:22 pm
JerseyGirl716 BRONZE, Central, New Jersey
2 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We gain strength, and courage, and confidence by each experience in which we really stop to look fear in the face... we must do that which we think we cannot." -Eleanor Roosevelt

I think what threw me off was "has bleed"; something there doesn't sound right to me, but I can't think of how to fix it. So just totally ignore my comment, it's a great poem either way :)

on Aug. 2 2011 at 3:52 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
42 articles 11 photos 333 comments
It's supposed to be bleed. The whole poem is in present tense.

on Aug. 1 2011 at 11:16 pm
JerseyGirl716 BRONZE, Central, New Jersey
2 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We gain strength, and courage, and confidence by each experience in which we really stop to look fear in the face... we must do that which we think we cannot." -Eleanor Roosevelt

I love it! Just one thing: should "bleed" be "bled", or am I missing something? Great poem, awesome imagery!

on Jul. 30 2011 at 2:54 pm
Tiffanie_marie GOLD, Sedro-Woolley, Washington
18 articles 1 photo 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't tell me the sky is the limit, when there are footprints on the moon.

I really like this poem, it gives me the sense that you can find beauty in the simplest of things

Vicky11 SILVER said...
on Jul. 27 2011 at 11:53 am
Vicky11 SILVER, Charlottenlund, Other
9 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
The wisest men follow their own direction - Euripides

Lovely poem, I love running through fields, and you captured the feeling of it perfectly :)

on Jul. 27 2011 at 8:39 am
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
59 articles 0 photos 670 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Great imagery and your flow is also pretty fantastic :) Keep writing!

on Jul. 19 2011 at 1:19 pm
ohheyyyelli SILVER, Woonsocket, Rhode Island
5 articles 3 photos 178 comments
Lovely imagrey, once again[:

on Jul. 18 2011 at 5:22 pm
fictitious-quandary GOLD, Orlando, Florida
18 articles 5 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
Knowing is not enough; we must apply.
Willing is not enough; we must do.
Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

"Whether you think you can or you think you can't, you're right"
- Henry Ford

  Great job! Great personification & imagery, its a very vivid, amazing poem!

OceanFey GOLD said...
on Jul. 14 2011 at 2:31 pm
OceanFey GOLD, North Potomac, Maryland
12 articles 1 photo 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is easy to hate and it is difficult to love. This is how the whole scheme of things works. All good things are difficult to achieve; and bad things are very easy to get. - Confucius

I really like this poem. I felt like I could feel every emotion :)