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June 20, 2011
By musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
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musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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you wrap around my
mind
like a vine
your all I can
think about
now your with
someone else
that's what hurts
the most

© Devin N., Sherrills Ford, NC

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musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 17 2011 at 2:50 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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thank u again:P
TheSilverLaurel GOLD said...
on Jul. 17 2011 at 12:24 pm
TheSilverLaurel GOLD, Goole, Other
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this is brilliant. I like how it's short, so its not like pages, and its to the point. The metaphor is amazing, great comparison :) 5 stars
__horizon133 PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 11 2011 at 9:00 pm
__horizon133 PLATINUM, Portage, Michigan
26 articles 0 photos 231 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;laugh, and the world laughs with you. laugh hysterically, and for no apparent reason, and they will leave you alone.&quot; anonymous

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whoa! speaking of avatars, i know that bear! but from where.../;p
Tink1350 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 10 2011 at 6:02 pm
Tink1350 BRONZE, Medford, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Worries are like weights and weights keep you down, so let go of your worries and fly,&quot;

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ahahahahah
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 10 2011 at 1:14 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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i like ur avatar pic
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 10 2011 at 1:14 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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thanks i like your avatar pic :P
Tink1350 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 10 2011 at 1:13 pm
Tink1350 BRONZE, Medford, New York
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;Worries are like weights and weights keep you down, so let go of your worries and fly,&quot;

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this is great. good job.
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 10 2011 at 1:04 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
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Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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thanks i know i'm probably being over dramatic
CallMeMrs.Batman SILVER said...
on Jul. 10 2011 at 1:00 pm
CallMeMrs.Batman SILVER, Moreno Valley, California
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&quot;It takes a great deal of courage to stand up to our enemies, but a great deal more to stand up to our friends.&quot;<br /> -Professor Dumbledore to Harry Potter<br /> &quot;What doesn&#039;t kill you, makes you stronger.&quot;<br /> -Unknown

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this is fantastic... I see the way it involved you-know-who lol on my way to look at visions lol

 

__horizon133 PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 9 2011 at 12:31 pm
__horizon133 PLATINUM, Portage, Michigan
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ouch! another looming aspect of life and love effortlessly captured...well done, well done. :)
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 8 2011 at 7:07 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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o gotcha !!!
MidnightFire PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 8 2011 at 2:16 pm
MidnightFire PLATINUM, Lincoln, Illinois
40 articles 6 photos 239 comments

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&#039;Dream as if you will live forever, live as if you&#039;ll die tomorrow.&#039;<br /> for my sister: &#039;when life gives me lemons ... i eat them&#039;<br /> &#039;do not be afraid, be faithful&#039;<br /> &#039;God is not safe, but He&#039;s good&#039;

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like how you met them or something like that
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 8 2011 at 1:02 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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thanks!!! :P
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 8 2011 at 12:38 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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thank you what do u mean by unnescessary background
MidnightFire PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 8 2011 at 10:40 am
MidnightFire PLATINUM, Lincoln, Illinois
40 articles 6 photos 239 comments

Favorite Quote:
&#039;Dream as if you will live forever, live as if you&#039;ll die tomorrow.&#039;<br /> for my sister: &#039;when life gives me lemons ... i eat them&#039;<br /> &#039;do not be afraid, be faithful&#039;<br /> &#039;God is not safe, but He&#039;s good&#039;

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nice :) i think its good that you stay on track and don't add any unnecessary background.
sakina GOLD said...
on Jul. 8 2011 at 12:39 am
sakina GOLD, Chennai, Other
18 articles 13 photos 173 comments

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A negative thinker See&#039;s a difficulty in every opportunity but a positive thinker sees an opportunity in every difficulty. So always think positive and u&#039;ll surely B successful in LIFE.<br /> -Hazrat Ali (A.S)

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Its nice..And short Like the other's said and right to the point...
musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 11:06 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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thank u and i'll work on that i promise :P
CarrieAnn13 GOLD said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 11:00 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
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&quot;I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by.&quot; --Douglas Adams<br /> <br /> &quot;The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane.&quot; --Marcus Aurelius

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Like Garnet77 said, it's short and to the point.  You used the wrong 'your' again, though.  It should be 'you're.'

Other than that, I think it's great!

musicispassion PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 10:41 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

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i know i write it so fast that I don't pay attentiton sorry and thanks i'll take your advice
Garnet77 PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 9:31 pm
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
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&quot;Everything&#039;s a triangle.&quot; ~ My mother<br /> <br /> &quot;Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it&#039;s the easiest way to be heard.&quot;

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I like that this is so short and to the point. It revolves around that one emotion, yet it also seems conflicting at the same time. It's great how you were able to do that in so few lines. Good job! Though fixing the 'your' thing would make it perfect :)