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Vines

June 20, 2011
By musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them


you wrap around my
mind
like a vine
your all I can
think about
now your with
someone else
that's what hurts
the most



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on Jul. 6 2011 at 7:22 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
35 articles 0 photos 733 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot; Life is never easy for those who dream.&quot;<br /> There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

thanks and I'll take both ur advice

on Jul. 6 2011 at 10:03 am
FrownMonaLisa SILVER, Arlington, Texas
5 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don&#039;t cry because it&#039;s over. Smile because it happened

This is quite a good poem. Try and work on your grammar though it is a little lacking. I see some great potential in your work so keep up the good work. :)

on Jul. 6 2011 at 4:42 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
41 articles 0 photos 650 comments

Favorite Quote:
&lrm;&quot;I&rsquo;m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don&rsquo;t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world.&quot; - Beyonc&eacute;

Uh-oh.

You used your instead of you're. If you want to improve, take notes of your mistakes and make sure you don't do the same mistakes over and over again.

By the way, this is another good short poem that you made.

Keep writing... :) Even though you always have that mistake, I believe you will one day be able to get rid of it. :)