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September 4, 2011
By Steph0804 GOLD, Seoul, Other
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"Explaining a joke is like dissecting a frog: you understand it better, but the frog dies in the process." -E.B. White

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I see her

lips,
chapped, dry, bleeding
from the constant torment of her teeth

fingernails
cracked, frail, jagged
ragged flesh tearing off of the quick

hair
limp, thin, colorless
missing in patches from her scalp

eyes
dull, bleak, swollen
giving proof to her lack of sleep

She reaches out
with two shaking hands-


I rip the mirror off the wall.

© Monica L., St. George, UT

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BluBliss GOLD said...
on Nov. 4 2011 at 1:59 pm
BluBliss GOLD, New York, New York
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I tagged this as a favorite halfway through it. I could never have thought of formatting it so the first sentence served as teh first sentence for each paragraph. (i know close to zip about poetry, so i'm using prose terms, my bad.) And how it makes sense that the whole thing besides the last sentence is in third person, because...well it's a mirror. Good job, this is, like, a masserpiece.
TheGirlWhoDancesWithSnowflakes SILVER said...
on Oct. 10 2011 at 6:08 pm
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Woah! I'm loving the twist at the end! It really threw me off guard! :) Another brilliant poem by a brilliant writer!
RyanTyler PLATINUM said...
on Oct. 4 2011 at 10:31 am
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Really good. I've been trying to work with a concept like that for awhile and can never get it right, Keep it up
CarrieAnn13 GOLD said...
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Again, I love the twist at the end of your poem!  The imagery in this poem is excellent; I appreciate your descriptiveness.  Excellent work!
JoPepper PLATINUM said...
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Wow no words!!!! :D
Mystiecub said...
on Sep. 30 2011 at 3:09 pm
Umm...do I know you in real life, or are you somehow able to read people's minds? xD
Great job; this actually sent a chill up my spine. Keep writing, :D This is going on my favorite's list
PaigeStreet PLATINUM said...
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Hot dang. This is real potential. In fact, its more than that. its good even as is, potential poetic skill aside. 
Kvothe28 SILVER said...
on Sep. 25 2011 at 9:41 pm
Kvothe28 SILVER, Temecula, California
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I thought this was really good, and the ending totally caught me off guard. I hope you keep writing poems.
Steph0804 GOLD said...
on Sep. 16 2011 at 8:06 pm
Steph0804 GOLD, Seoul, Other
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Thank you :D
sunny.all.day. GOLD said...
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Wow! This is really good!  I love how you had specific adjectives for each part :) and then at the end, it's like a poem of self hatred O_o I think. but it's good! :)