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Indifferent Love

October 11, 2011
By Signed_DK SILVER, Declo, Idaho
Signed_DK SILVER, Declo, Idaho
5 articles 1 photo 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is no line between genius and insanity, I erased it.

Violence isn't the answer, it's the solution.


The two were stuck. Each fallen for the other. Their lives intertwined by fate or destiny.
But something happened.
The knot was broken. Their love destroyed. Another person became involved. THey were heart broken.
A boy found the opening. Took the girl, and they left into the suset.
But the problem wasn't over.
Without knowing, another boy was dragged into the fray. The one who could help with any type of depression, but even he had trouble with this case. He had friends on both sides of the war.
Now the problem solved, his work was still effortless. A certain match making was all it needed.
Finished with his task he left it unnoticed, or so he thought.


The author's comments:
A fight is all you need to inspire the sadest story.

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on Nov. 11 2011 at 4:00 pm
Danealle SILVER, Wheeling, Illinois
7 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
Anything is possible with a smile and goal in mind.

After reading many of your poems I think you need to really focus on breaking them up. Also show me they were destined to be together instead of telling me. 

.Izzy. BRONZE said...
on Nov. 9 2011 at 3:56 pm
.Izzy. BRONZE, Broadview Heights, Ohio
1 article 0 photos 388 comments
Great poem, although it would be a lot easier to read if you broke it into stanzas. A little confusing due to the fact that as the poem goes on more and more people are added into the conflict. Maybe instead of "the boy" and "another boy", you could be more descriptive and use "the jock" or the "quiet boy". Other than that, I think almost anyone can relate to this sort of situation. Keep writing!

on Nov. 8 2011 at 5:24 pm
kingofwriters BRONZE, DeWitt, Michigan
1 article 0 photos 196 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Books are a uniquely portable magic." - Stephen King

I love books, and I love technology, but I don't want to see the latter overwhelm the former. I just think books are meant to be pages you turn, not screens you scroll through.

It's pretty good, but I would like to hear more of the story. And there are also some spelling and grammar mistakes that you might need to work on.

 

But overall, it was good! I'd give it 4 out of 5 stars!


on Oct. 28 2011 at 10:16 pm
RayBaytheDinosaur GOLD, Hampton, South Carolina
18 articles 17 photos 159 comments

Favorite Quote:
Beauty is in the eye of the beholder

Its intresting how it tells a story, but maybe you could seperate it into stanzas?