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I love you, too.

January 6, 2012
By alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
alligator6 SILVER, Neenah, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger.

At the edge of the hospital bed
I feel a thousand miles away.
Can he hear me?
I hope he can hear me.
My heart ushers his eyes to open
Only to find stillness in return.
I want to paint his face
Put the color back in his once rosy cheeks.
Just yesterday that smile lit up the room.
Now the beep of his heart rate reminds me
To breath
To touch
To feel
I want to break the monitor.
Put a miracle in the rhythm
Of a heart that fails to keep beating.
The wires all over are holding him here
Giving me one last chance
To say goodbye.
If he can even hear me.
I pray to God he can hear me.
I find his hand under the sheets
I hold onto it for dear life.
My heart aches to feel the warmth
To feel the life that loved to live
To hear his laughter once again
And put it in my dreams for safe keeping.
Daddies are supposed to laugh.
Why can't I hear him one more time?
The memories stay as his soul leaves
I say the last words I want him to hear
Can he hear me?
I pray to God he can hear me.
His voice echoes in my head
"I love you, too."

The author's comments:
My dad passed away last year and poetry has helped me cope. It's my heart spilled out into words. It feels amazing.

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on Jan. 15 2012 at 12:52 pm
lezziefarie GOLD, Palestine, Texas
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sometimes you get away with a mistake and other times life forces you to watch the one you love, love some one else......

it has a dark beauty about it

on Jan. 14 2012 at 5:02 pm
emmabergman GOLD, ., New Jersey
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This is very emotional and lovely. I rated it 5 stars ! :)

on Jan. 14 2012 at 4:06 pm
vetlover21 SILVER, Bronx, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"changeing for pople doesn\\\'t make you friends for life, staying yourslef does."

it's so beautiful and sad your a wonderful writer

on Jan. 14 2012 at 2:12 pm
Wired_To_Inspire PLATINUM, Coopersburg, Pennsylvania
49 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Your mind fights the battles, but your heart wins the war." -Liz Ruth

This is very beautiful. Not a flaw I spotted. it's perfect and wonderful just like you.

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on Jan. 14 2012 at 11:42 am
O.G.B, Phoenix, Arizona
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What a lovely poem , it is really touching and you can see/feel what is going on there. 5/5

on Jan. 14 2012 at 6:15 am
kiLLaBLoke3 GOLD, Kegalle, Other
13 articles 3 photos 113 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never worry if u have or had any bad, bitter experiences, because, that can be what made u perfect or better than how u were.

Really sorry about what happened! :( (sigh) We've only got to be strong enough to get over it! Beautiful lines! Btw, dont mind to check out my articles and one of them - CREEP THROUGH DARKNESS- hope that it will help u.

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on Jan. 13 2012 at 11:33 am
sxsilence, Canton, Ohio
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
live ur life the way you want to. its your life you can do whatever u want good or bad just remember theirs always karma and consequences.

i like your poem :) its really good

on Jan. 13 2012 at 12:16 am
thatonelostguy BRONZE, Chanute, Kansas
2 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Captain, I wish to report a mutiny. I can name fingers and point names.

it was beautiful and amazing, extremely moving, i felt your emotions through the page and cried a little bit

on Jan. 12 2012 at 4:35 pm
SoSammieWhatsUP BRONZE, East Stroundburg, Pennsylvania
4 articles 1 photo 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you born poor it is not your fault, but if you die poor it is your fault." Bill Gates

this quote is not how it appears, it is about coming from nothing and making something of yourself.

I'm speechless. true beauty, and magic are found in your words

on Jan. 12 2012 at 4:32 pm
Frankieeee BRONZE, Woodridge, Illinois
2 articles 0 photos 4 comments
Awww(: I really love this poem and it shows much emotion. its amazing

on Jan. 12 2012 at 11:50 am
musiclover97 GOLD, Elkins, West Virginia
19 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Trying to forget someone you love is like trying to remember someone you never knew."
"Writing is art to the blind, music to the deaf, comfort to the broken, and emotions to the expressionless."

This is amazing

on Jan. 11 2012 at 9:56 pm
livelovesmile GOLD, Gaithersburg, Maryland
19 articles 0 photos 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am like a star burst. A juicy contradiction. I'm hard to figure out, but when you get to my center, your suprised! It's not what you thought it would be, huh.

This is so touching and you can really feel the emotions thorugh your words. Great job, keep writing!

on Jan. 11 2012 at 6:02 pm
ColeCope BRONZE, Canton, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"The difference between the almost right word & the right word is the difference between lightning and the lightning bug."~ Mark Twain

Wow, very powerful! I can feel the emotion. I'm sorry that happend, just so you know, you are a beautiful writer! (:

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on Jan. 11 2012 at 4:34 pm
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on Jan. 11 2012 at 4:18 pm
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

This is touching and sad and amazing...i can totally see everything you described...i'm sure this poem will get in the magazine and i'm so sorry you had to go through what you described...5/5 without a doubt

on Jan. 11 2012 at 3:47 pm
HiddenAngelInTheDark PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
39 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
Theres so many that I can't pick sorry

I agrees it's sooo beautiful and deep and meaningful but remember he's in a better place now watching over you

on Jan. 11 2012 at 3:43 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
24 articles 0 photos 382 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

This is beautiful, and the you express the emotion here so wonderfully..... I got tears in my eyes by the time I finished. So, so sorry you had to go through this.

on Jan. 11 2012 at 1:03 am
camcam2525 BRONZE, Columbus, Ohio
2 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Hard fate of man on whom the heavens bestow,
a drop of pleasure for a sea of woe.

this is seriously so sad, and the imagery in it is so beautiful. you are amazing at capturing the emotion that goes with this

on Jan. 11 2012 at 12:37 am
kissingdarkness SILVER, Mill Creek, Oklahoma
7 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
lets see............ be yourself

i really like this i felt the same way when my dad past four yrs ago

on Jan. 11 2012 at 12:10 am
Wildflower30 SILVER, Kolkata, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Create your own sayings, for only then do they make sense most. ---- Me

Beautiful. Readers can feel you. I would have been a spoiled sport and would not have talked about such a sensitive topic, that too, in poetry. Amazing job. I love it. Tagged as a favourite! :)