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Sitting Alone

July 24, 2012
By so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."


Sitting alone
In a darkened room.
Knees hugged to my chest,
My breath coming in raw gasps of air.
A tear trickles down my cheek slowly,
Appreciating every second of its journey.

I close my eyes,
The pain is too much to bear.
You left me here.
This is where I saw you last.
Somehow,
I still smell,
The smells of our past.
I smell the lilies
You gave me that night.
The smell is overpowering,
Surrounding me in a deafening circle.
The aroma hurts my nose,
I could taste them in my mouth.
Those lilies you gave me were white-
Like the white of a cloud.
A meaningless, cloud.
Then, the lilies’ perfume was sweet and dainty,
Now the scent haunts me like a devil.


That night we sat here
In this very room.
The night we danced
By the open window.
I can almost feel the chilly breeze
Whispering in my ear, now.
On a night like tonight,
The full moon shines
The only light in the room.
It shines on the wall behind me.
That night was a full moon too.
One of your hands was at my waist,
The other at my shoulder.
The sound of a melody
Playing in the background.
It sounded like a lullaby,
With the rhythm of tip-toe, tip-toe.
I remember laughing at us
Dancing by the open window.
Then you kissed me.


I open my eyes.
Pain is shrieking in my heart,
Thundering in my skull.
Angry bullets dance their way in the pit of my stomach,
Making a dreadful knot appear.
You left me here.
Lilies blur my vision,
And I want to cry,
But I can't remember how.
The scent making me in dizzy,
The pain squeezing me into a tight, small ball.
The moonlight flashing through the open window
A reminder of what happened.
A dreadful, traumatizing reminder.


I want to get up,
Break the window glass,
Ruin and destroy the only evidence of you.
But I forget how.
Everything is slipping away...
Away…
Away…
Where are you?



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so_joy SILVER said...
on Nov. 29 2012 at 11:41 am
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you SO much!!!

so_joy SILVER said...
on Nov. 28 2012 at 12:47 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you so much!!!

on Nov. 27 2012 at 9:14 pm
ChobaniLuvinPenguin PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
29 articles 0 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
"What makes the desert beautiful is that somewhere it hides a well."
― Antoine de Saint-Exupéry, The Little Prince

I absolutely love this poem! You are amazing at conveying emotions through your writing! Perhaps you should try writing prose. The descriptions in here are beautiful and simply astounding, and the phrasing is great (especially in the last stanza). Just a minor thing, you repeated the word "smell" twice in stanza 2 and it was a bit repetitive, but it's no biggie. Everything else is perfect! This is a piece I will never forget!

so_joy SILVER said...
on Nov. 18 2012 at 5:56 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you!!

on Nov. 16 2012 at 11:55 pm
Shortblueeyes224 DIAMOND, Auburntown, Tennessee
57 articles 0 photos 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Are We Happy Plastic People"- Casting Crowns "While we're sung to sleep by philosophies that save the trees and kill the children" - Casting Crowns "It's such a secret place, the land of tears"Antoine de Saint-Exupery

Yours words are so powerful! Your descriptions of everything you felt brought me to a time when I felt like that. Great Job :)

OldYoungOne said...
on Nov. 16 2012 at 2:39 pm
I enjoy the use of imagery in this poem I could see everything you were describing as well as feel for myself. Again Nice Job. Could you read some of my other works I would appreciate it. Comment and Rate too please :):)

so_joy SILVER said...
on Nov. 8 2012 at 5:22 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you so much

mee-mee SILVER said...
on Nov. 5 2012 at 10:21 am
mee-mee SILVER, Orlando, Florida
6 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"we all have dreams. but always remember with that dream comes a star. trust in yourself, believe in who you are. with nothing but confidence you will go far."
-mee-mee hoskins






quote written by:mee mee hoskins

ohhh eemmm geee !!! yesss !!! very pwerful discriptions . i felt some pain and loneliness .. very good !

so_joy SILVER said...
on Oct. 10 2012 at 7:02 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you!

on Oct. 8 2012 at 6:01 pm
mellowmari SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
5 articles 3 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Life lives, life dies. Life laughs, life cries. Life gives up and life tries. But life looks different through everyone's eyes.”

Wow powerful descriptions! You really kept me engaged with your word choice! :)

so_joy SILVER said...
on Sep. 10 2012 at 5:25 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you!

so_joy SILVER said...
on Sep. 10 2012 at 5:25 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you!

on Sep. 10 2012 at 2:37 pm
garshongjasmine SILVER, Accra, Other
7 articles 0 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
happiness resides not in possesions, and not in gold, the feeling of happiness dwells in the soul























-democritus

love the way you left me hanging on the last line... great work..:)  

so_joy SILVER said...
on Sep. 6 2012 at 3:52 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you!!

on Sep. 6 2012 at 10:15 am
MarieAntoinette2014 DIAMOND, Scottsburg, Indiana
54 articles 2 photos 237 comments

Favorite Quote:
Isn't it ironic? We ignore the ones who adore us, adore the ones who ignore us, love the ones who hurt us, and hurt the ones that love us.

... Omg... That's amazing. Definitely a favorite of mine. Great descriptions and amzing emotion.

so_joy SILVER said...
on Aug. 30 2012 at 5:50 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you SO much!!

so_joy SILVER said...
on Aug. 30 2012 at 5:49 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you!

so_joy SILVER said...
on Aug. 30 2012 at 5:49 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 722 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Thank you! I was writing about a girl who was left by the love of her life, and she's trying to get over it, but she can't because all the memories keep on flooding her mind. I tried to convey as much emotion as possible.

amber603 GOLD said...
on Aug. 29 2012 at 10:17 pm
amber603 GOLD, Durango, Colorado
10 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You know that place between sleep and awake, the place where you can still remember dreaming? That's where I will always love you. That's where I'll be waiting." - J.M.B.

To the well-organized mind, death is but the next great adventure." - J.K.R.

I cant believe how beatiful your writing is. I felt like this once and was never able to put it to words but you did that for me. Awesome!

on Aug. 29 2012 at 9:05 pm
curlygurlray GOLD, Visalia, California
18 articles 1 photo 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
you have the life you let yourself take.

wow. this is amazing! its riviting with pain, you can feel what your going through and you leave the readers wondering what had happened. great job(: