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Me and You

September 11, 2009
By I-Love-Him!!!! BRONZE, Union City, Tennessee
I-Love-Him!!!! BRONZE, Union City, Tennessee
1 article 0 photos 4 comments

I love you,
You love me,
Me and are meant to be.

We see fear,
We see cheer,
Me and you,
Our hearts are near,
Together forever is what is seems,
Me and you always in our dreams.

I loved you,
You loved me,
Me and you were meant to be.

We saw fear,
We saw cheer,
Me and you,
Our hearts were near,
Together forever is what it seemed,
Me and you,
Were always in our dreams.



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Fate98 GOLD said...
on Apr. 24 2011 at 6:42 am
Fate98 GOLD, Glasgow, Other
11 articles 0 photos 36 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life isn’t about how popular you are… What girl or boy you are dating or who you know. Life is about always being true to who you are or what you believe in. Never let anyone convince you that their way is better than your way. In the end all we have is our hearts.. and our minds. This is the reason we sing.. this is the reason we cry… this is why we live." - Andy six"

Aw this is cute. I was singing it to the tune of Barney i asumed thats how it's ment to be read. If not well it works anyway lol

on Apr. 9 2011 at 3:54 pm
ilovedayna BRONZE, Story, Wyoming
3 articles 4 photos 77 comments

Favorite Quote:
i love you

it reminds me of barney :) no offense. it's pretty good though

PeepLoveR GOLD said...
on Feb. 17 2011 at 2:25 pm
PeepLoveR GOLD, Weston, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"The past may soon choose your future, and your future, may soon be your past." This a quote I thought of my self.

i really like how this poem flowed. it was really good

on Dec. 13 2010 at 2:43 pm
i luuvv it....it relates 2 me plz keep writing...it made me feel happy it reminded me of my ex he wuz ssoo kute =)

on Nov. 21 2010 at 1:50 pm
Glimmerglass BRONZE, Eugene, Oregon
2 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Two things are infinite: the universe and human stupidity, and I'm not sure about the universe." --Albert Einstein.

"Oh the words, the words, the achingly inadequate beautiful words."
-- Terry Hertzler

This was really sweet, and well composed, but you might want to submit under a different category. Haikus have a 5-7-5 syllable count and do not rhyme; otherwise, very nice!

on Oct. 8 2010 at 9:21 am
D-ray stop you complaining she is fine! but really you shouldnt forget words if you are going to post things on the internet! PROOFREAD!!it works wonders

D-Ray Son said...
on Oct. 8 2010 at 9:19 am
great job! :) but you are missing a word in the beginning..."you" other than that....awesome job

Amiee said...
on Oct. 8 2010 at 2:45 am

aww, cute! but still not haiku

would have done nice in the free verse place


on Sep. 16 2010 at 1:47 pm
Khia_A. PLATINUM, Sicily Island, Louisiana
34 articles 3 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
Stay who you are no matter what you face along the way.

I agree that this is not a haiku but I like it. You should have did free verse but nice work.

Yaya21 GOLD said...
on Sep. 16 2010 at 1:31 pm
Yaya21 GOLD, Columbus, Ohio
15 articles 1 photo 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
love and death what it is dont stop in fear, love yall ba, leave please, danger is reality, dont controll the feelin then y keep having it. hurt and pain is all part of life. life is too short to waste. believe what u believe in. love is a passion

it was good and right my favorite part was "together forever is what it seemed"

on Aug. 25 2010 at 8:00 am
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD, Martinsville, New Jersey
14 articles 1 photo 278 comments

Favorite Quote:
Worry is simply a misuse of the imagination.

well... i don't think this is a haiku. and it didn't really flow too well. it's a nice idea though, i like the present tense and then the change to past tense.

on Jul. 12 2010 at 1:08 pm
ForeverWonderland BRONZE, Tallahassee, Florida
2 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
Cross me, and the protagonist dies. ...Then again, they probably will anyway.

I like the actualy poem, but a Haiku poem is 5-7-5.

on Apr. 15 2010 at 4:45 pm
Demon_of_Truth, Warrenton, Virginia
0 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm not a geek, I prefer the term 'intellectual bad-a**"

I think you need to review your poetry forms, haiku is 5-7-5. I'm almost positive that this is a balad or free verse . . . :(

on Apr. 15 2010 at 1:52 pm
you need to count the sylables but other than that u are a great writer

on Apr. 15 2010 at 10:30 am
Hannah17 BRONZE, Bogalusa, Louisiana
2 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"FEARLESS is not the absense of fear. It's not being completely unafraid. To me, FEARLESS is having fears. FEARLESS is having doubts. Lots of them. To me, FEARLESS is living in spite of those things that scare you to death." Taylor Swift

is this too the tune of the Barney theme song?? if so thats a really creative way of making it so much better

on Jan. 12 2010 at 8:50 pm
sasssgirrrl22 PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
27 articles 0 photos 266 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Giving up is not a part of my vocabulary."
"Don't let the fear of striking out keep you from playing the game."
"Truth be told I miss ya, truth be told I'm lying."

i like this. its realy cute. how r u counting the syllablez??

on Dec. 26 2009 at 7:47 pm
9CatsPerLife101 PLATINUM, Fairfax, Virginia
20 articles 0 photos 96 comments
Is this a haiku? I don't know how you're counting the syllables, but I can't make it into 5-7-5. Maybe it's just me. :(

Bri Lane said...
on Nov. 12 2009 at 10:49 am
This is awesome! I love it. Great job. Please keep righting you are so good at it.

demartinot said...
on Oct. 21 2009 at 3:59 pm
This was an amazingly descriptive poem. When you said "I loved you, You loved me..." Do you still love eachother or was it just in the past? Also when you say "Our hearts are near." Do each of you know you love each other or is it secretive? This was a fantastic poem! Keep Writing!

on Oct. 16 2009 at 9:18 am
I-Love-Him!!!! BRONZE, Union City, Tennessee
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thanx 4 tha comment and i will try t o keep writing