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November 7, 2012
By AgentOrange789 GOLD, Friendswood, Texas
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&quot;It&#039;s a saying they have, that a man has a false heart in his mouth for the world to see, another in his breast to show to his special friends and his family, and the real one, the true one, the secret one, which is never known to anyone except to himself alone, hidden only God knows where.&quot;<br /> -James Clavell, &quot;Shogun&quot;

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We watch in awe as
From within the clasp of earth
A hibiscus blooms.

© Ashley F., Quincy, MA

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WinstonSmith BRONZE said...
on Apr. 23 2013 at 5:55 pm
WinstonSmith BRONZE, Columbia, Missouri
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This is lovely!
the_sparrow SILVER said...
on Nov. 22 2012 at 2:49 am
the_sparrow SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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I definitely like the theme; a flower blooming from "the clasp of earth" is astonishing, because life--along with all the processes which make it possible--is so incredibly bold. Life is success and beauty in spite of that which would encumber it. There's so much to say about this subject...and so it is very difficult to wrap it all up into a short haiku. Regardless, well done!
PaigeStreet PLATINUM said...
on Nov. 20 2012 at 3:21 pm
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
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This is a model haiku, with a central nature-metaphor, and a shift before the last line. I love the "clasp of earth," and the image of "us" watching the flower. That being said, without a larger concept, this image is a littl e simple and unremarkable. Altogether, though, great job.