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August 3, 2013
By 411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
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In the beginning
When the sky was black coffee
God poured in some cream

© Kena A., Huntsville, AL

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When a person pours cream into a cup of dark coffee, there is a wonderful moment of diffusion where billowing clouds consume the murk. When I look up at the sky and see clouds, this is what I am reminded of. This comparison inspired an adaptation of the Christian creation story.
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411Ellie PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 12 2013 at 7:16 pm
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
41 articles 28 photos 235 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Paper is more patient than people." –Anne Frank

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Thank you very much! I think that your poem, Taste of Deceit, is brilliant!
411Ellie PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 12 2013 at 7:12 pm
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
41 articles 28 photos 235 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Paper is more patient than people." –Anne Frank

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Thank you! I am a fan of your poetry. My favorite is Aliases Aplenty. Congratulations on winning the Editors' Choice award as well :)
ChrisJ PLATINUM said...
on Aug. 12 2013 at 5:15 pm
ChrisJ PLATINUM, Rochester, New York
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"Man must evolve for all human conflict a method which rejects revenge, aggression and retaliation. The foundation of such a method is love.”
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This is a very clever piece. I like how you compared the clouds in the sky to God's cream. Very cool, and great job!
Carpe-Caffeam GOLD said...
on Aug. 12 2013 at 3:21 pm
Carpe-Caffeam GOLD, No Where, Florida
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“If it weren’t for the coffee, I’d have no identifiable personality whatsoever.” –David Letterman

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I LOVE THIS. Awesome job and congrats on the award!