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I Tried

October 7, 2009
By cross.fire BRONZE, Monroe, Louisiana
cross.fire BRONZE, Monroe, Louisiana
2 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is the fire and hope is what burns."

Once upon a dream time place
Where mine-o-tours live and nomads stay
I was walking in a mystic purple haze
And what do I see but the sun,
The sun the color of golden gray.

I told the mayor of that little town
But he dismissed it, saying other things were going down. So I walked out of city hall and lo and behold
The sun started to to fall!

I ran all the way to the Lady of the Lake
And as I ran the earth started to shake
Oh my my my that's what happened to this place before most humans came

Now that sun of ours is turning golden gray
And I'll try to warn you though you'll ignore it anyway
And as the earth as we know it starts to die
I'll be watching from a pillar of cloud in the sky.

The author's comments:
The world as we know it seems to be heading into another dark age. If you haven't noticed, look at it now. It's not a bad thing though, and it might be kind of fun. I guess this is why I chose to write this. I really wrote this ditty to pass the time. I like it though. Thanks for reading!

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on Mar. 31 2011 at 3:40 pm
MaiMorris BRONZE, Lynbrook, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"I bear a charmed life." -William Shakespeare

I like this poem, too. It made me smile. Just out of curiousity, is "the Lady of the Lake" part of the poem refering to the Arthurian legend?

on Nov. 5 2009 at 2:54 pm
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

I like this poem alot... the flows nice and so is the way you worded things... it made me imagination run... n def kept my attention! vry nice:) u should check out some of my stuff;)

on Nov. 5 2009 at 12:01 pm
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

i like this! :) it's creative and it paints a different kind of picture in the reader's mind. it's flow is really great, it makes the poem sounds so deep :) i like it :) keep writing!! also, check out some of my work if you could, id love your opinion ;)