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God, Can You Hear Me?
September 18, 2009
I try to talk to you
But it's like you're not there
My words fade away
Into empty air
(Chorus)
Can you hear me?
Can my prayer reach that far?
Do you hear one child's cry
Wherever you are?
I'm just one small voice
In a world of pain
And I'm not sure
So I'll ask again
Can you hear me?
I try to hear your voice
But you seem so far away
I know you're calling me
But I don't know what you're saying
I can't hear you
(Chorus)
I can't hear you
I'm drowning in my sin
I try to reach for you
But I'm falling down again
One still, small voice
In a world of pain
If I try hard enough
I know I can
I can hear you
Rolling like thunder
In my once dead heart
I can hear you speaking
We were never apart
I can hear you
© Rebecca B., Santa Clara, CA
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This article has 56 comments.
silence-is-loud GOLD said...
on Jun. 18 2011 at 3:29 pm
I love this!!! I especially love the ending when you say " we were never apart/I can hear you" :) keep up the good work!
Lysergia said...
on Apr. 26 2011 at 4:35 pm
Rebecca B. as in Rebecca Black?!
Cause_OneMore BRONZE said...
on Apr. 4 2011 at 4:55 pm
Great Job On your song its message is so clear and I wish I could hear it how the music go's or at least have the chords or music but all in all its one of the best songs I have read on this sight way to go please check out my stuff if not thats totally fine Stay with your faith never loose hope and also you song really spoke to my heart its really what I needed to read.
Girl, this is great. I wish I could write lyrics like this, but sadly all I can write is chords structures and melodies. If you're interested, just saying. But this was probably one of the best songlyrics I have ever heard. Could even be a Christ Tomlin song.
Carmella_Hastings GOLD said...
on Oct. 9 2010 at 12:12 pm
God bless ya child, this is really amazing :) straight to the favorites.
ShenelleCrystal SILVER said...
on Jul. 9 2010 at 9:28 pm
This is really pretty
estu_2011 said...
on Jun. 22 2010 at 1:30 pm
I agree...I would love to here the song put to music.
SomeoneWhoListens said...
on Jun. 13 2010 at 1:05 pm
Great song. I would try to sing it and play along and mabey put it on youtube.
bluespark13 said...
on Jun. 7 2010 at 7:19 pm
this song is really nice ,a work of art XD i kinda relate to it cuz i feel that way most of the time -.-...im new on teen ink :)
juliette said...
on Apr. 23 2010 at 10:24 am
you're welcome. i love evanescence too, and for months i've been struggling to learn how to write a song that would fit their style. i can just hope to be that good, my own writing style is still far behind this...
ElizabethW. DIAMOND said...
on Apr. 22 2010 at 7:48 pm
Thank you so much much, I love them! Pretty much the best compliment you couldhave given me =)
juliette said...
on Apr. 17 2010 at 3:03 am
This could totally be an early Evanescence song! I'm so impressed
ElizabethW. DIAMOND said...
on Mar. 27 2010 at 4:54 pm
I don't really have much advice. Believe me, for every good song there are a dozen failures (and I don't post those!). I guess what I would suggest is to stick to a meter for the verses and another for the chorus, plus maybe a bridge, for form. Then use lots of creative language, with metaphors and colorful adjectives. I don't know if you like the song Fireflies by Owl City, but the greatest thing to me about it is the ongoing metaphor about recapturing childhood and all of the beautiful wordage. Songs like that are pretty much what I aim for, although none of my mine are radio material!
ShannonVictoria BRONZE said...
on Mar. 26 2010 at 7:36 pm
You've got some talent writing songs. and i am honestly impressed. i too try and write songs, but they're never that good. Do you have any advice in how to write some good songs? if your wondering, i try to write songs for my friends that leave that way they know how i feel when i they are leaving and so that they know how much i will miss them and so that they never forget about all the fun times we have. Please, if you dont mind, please reply back (whenever you can) and give me some advice on how to write some good songs. Cant wait to hear back from you! :D
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