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My Melody

October 10, 2013
By VampiricAngel13 BRONZE, Randolph, Alabama
VampiricAngel13 BRONZE, Randolph, Alabama
3 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
Courage is not the absence of fear.


You're my melody
Sweet and simple, beautifully you
Strong and soulful, all I'll ever need
A glorious melody
Let's me soar in a world of make believe
From a hard life, a welcome reprieve
Let's me fly away
'Cause you're my melody
On angel wings we coast over trees
Graceful and silent, an ethereal being
Such a joyous feeling
Sends a sweet thrill
So amazing how it makes me feel
'Cause you're my melody


The author's comments:
This is a song for someone I hope to meet one day, my soul mate Lucian Xavier Yates, thank you for checkin' it out!

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on Oct. 18 2013 at 3:27 pm
VampiricAngel13 BRONZE, Randolph, Alabama
3 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
Courage is not the absence of fear.

Thank you! I will take your advice to heart and do better on my next song, thank you for your tips and pointers. I'm also becoming a fan of your works!

on Oct. 17 2013 at 4:34 pm
AnInkling SILVER, Castle Rock, Colorado
6 articles 0 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
“This is your life. Is it everything you dreamed that it would be, when the world was younger and you had everything to lose?” Switchfoot
“Have I now become your enemy by telling you the truth?” Galatians 4:16

Beautiful! I would have liked to see it broken up in stanzas, though. Perhaps after "A glorious melody", and both "'Cause you're my melody". Also since you had such descriptive language throughout the poem, you might want to use "because" instead to keep it consistant. Personally, I like a little bit of rhyming in a poem, but that is my own opinion. But I really liked it! Good job!