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The Dance

October 5, 2009
By isabelc1011 SILVER, Chagrin Falls, Ohio
isabelc1011 SILVER, Chagrin Falls, Ohio
7 articles 0 photos 0 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Though much is taken, much abides; and though we are not now that strength which in old days moved earth and heaven; that which we are, we are; one equal temper of heroic hearts, made weak by time and fate, but strong in will to strive, to seek, to find, and not to yield." -Lord Alfred Tennyson

She spun alone in a poorly lit hall,
Her ivory gown twirling around the night,
Picturing in the room a royal ball,
When effortlessly, from out of her sight

Emerged another from against the wall,
Illuminating the dark without light,
And their palms, in the dark of love's enthrall,

Kissed to turn and twist into sweet delight.

But with the morn' the sun began to rise,
He did not remain with her, but instead,
When seeing dawn by looking through her eyes,
Without a word, he returned to his bed.
For of her love, he was never apprised
As she was invisible; she was dead.

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on Feb. 27 2012 at 3:55 pm
rebecca-rose GOLD, Shrewsbury, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
“Every thorn is just part of the stem to a beautiful rose” - R.R.

The last stanza gave me chills! I love this a lot, the depiction of the speaker is very vivid for me.  

on May. 9 2011 at 12:35 pm
DallyDysfunctional SILVER, Springfield, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
“The greatest education in the world is watching the masters at work.” - Michael Jackson

This is easily a favorite of mine.


I adore it!

devika said...
on Dec. 6 2010 at 9:06 am
lovely......its so amazing

dancer4life said...
on Oct. 1 2010 at 6:05 pm
this was great! i love the first stanza.

on Jan. 22 2010 at 7:14 pm
earthy_kat GOLD, Sebree, Kentucky
17 articles 1 photo 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"My heart has joined the Thousand, for my friend stopped running today." - Hazel from the book Watership Down (by Richard Adams).

Very impressive. Keep up the good work.

gabigal SILVER said...
on Nov. 16 2009 at 6:16 pm
gabigal SILVER, Conroe, Texas
6 articles 12 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"everything has beauty in it, you just have to see it"

i lovvveee this!!!!!! awesomness

on Oct. 23 2009 at 3:12 pm
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Oooo I love it! Vry well written...and the flow absolutly perfect:) If you have the chance you should check out some of my poems;)

on Oct. 14 2009 at 4:43 pm
Phantom_Girl GOLD, Ft. Carson, Colorado
14 articles 0 photos 279 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If it comes out of the lion's will be on the test."
-Mr. Bala

Beautiful:) And very descriptive. Keep it up:)

on Oct. 14 2009 at 1:47 am
Only,I PLATINUM, Taylorville, Illinois
45 articles 17 photos 123 comments

Favorite Quote:
This too shall pass.

This was beautiful, the words you used really painted a picture, I love all the descriptive words:)

Sunshineyday said...
on Oct. 13 2009 at 2:31 pm
i really dont like love-ish poems (or at least I don't write them) but this has good imagery and unbiasedelly judging it, I would say it is very very good.

on Oct. 13 2009 at 12:25 pm
michaela BRONZE, Green Cove Springs, Florida
2 articles 0 photos 15 comments
You are so talented!

I loved it so much, I had to read it twice...

The second stanza (lines 5-8) remind me of Romeo and Juliet.

Your choice of words is superb. Keep writing!


on Oct. 12 2009 at 7:17 pm
PunkRockLobster GOLD, Manhattan, Kansas
17 articles 4 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
Carpe diem quam minime credula postero (Seize the day, trusting as little as possible in the future)
And if not now, when?

brilliantly written! i would list a lot of things that i lovved, but inkspired pretty much summed it up for me :)

on Oct. 12 2009 at 6:33 pm
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
26 articles 0 photos 493 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

I love the imagery, and the description, beautiful idea, wonderful last line.... should I go on?

on Oct. 12 2009 at 4:53 pm
This piece had some great imagery, and I could truly picture some of the scenes you described. However, I didn't really catch on to the point or meaning of the poem, and I wasn't very impressed.

on Oct. 12 2009 at 4:19 pm
bonniex3rose GOLD, Pompton Plains, New Jersey
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the second line really grabbed my attention: the ivory gown. the word ivory almost makes it sound more antique and older, which helps to refer to the last line, "she was dead" all in all, it was an amazing piece, good job!