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15-Minute Wait for the Results MAG

By Anonymous

Skinny bird legs lying next to mine.
The one rubbing my thigh is tapping
up and down and up and down
because you are nervous about something.
Your finger, the one with the big red plastic ring,
is tapping on the peeling dark veneer rhythmically.
Your other hand is so clammy.
Like a turtleneck on a hot day,
like a wet turtleneck on a humid day.
The salmon-colored plastic sticks to my upper arm
in the small space between us on this love seat,
peeling away from my skin when I shift
with a sticky sound. Ouch.
There’s a rip, all jagged with
school bus-colored foam poking out.
Your nails are digging in,
as short as they are.
You are so afraid.
My nails are digging into your hand as well –
I can see the red-lined moons standing out plain as sight.
What was that old saying?
Red sky at night, sailor’s delight?
Or was it take warning?
Does a moon make the night red?
I ask you out loud, you laugh,
this queer little laugh
that isn’t a laugh at all.
Not really.
And you say it’s the first.
So we should delight and dance together like
we were doing just last week under that
tacky disco ball.
The door opens with a creak that reminds me
of an old haunted house. It’s all meant to scare.
The doctor walks in – shuffles really – lab coat knocking against his knees.
He’s kind-looking and old. Like a grandfather. Or uncle. Or something.
He moves past us.
Sits at his desk.
Pulls on his glasses – his eyes look so big.
Pulls out a manila folder.
Opens it.
Turns the page. Again. Again.
Licks his lips.
Takes glasses off – his eyes are small once more.
His chin rests on his folded hands.
“The test was positive.”
Your grip tightens, my grip tightens.
Many red moons across our hands.

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on May. 12 2010 at 2:50 pm
Alternatively BRONZE, Sorry, California
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“I've never been lonely. I've been in a room -- I've felt suicidal. I've been depressed. I've felt awful -- awful beyond all -- but I never felt that one other person could enter that room and cure what was bothering me...or that any number of people could enter that room. In other words, loneliness is something I've never been bothered with because I've always had this terrible itch for solitude.

It's REALLY AMAZING! love all the little details and dashes of foreshadowing....never stop writing:)

on May. 12 2010 at 1:55 pm
makemeflypeter BRONZE, Groveport, Ohio
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that was good [:

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on May. 12 2010 at 1:43 pm
shaniab SILVER, Hawthorne, California
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Wow, that was really interesting. I really was wondering what exactly was positive. I wish I could've known but Im guessing as well. Something, like Pregnancy or HIV.

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on May. 12 2010 at 10:19 am
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on Apr. 20 2010 at 9:55 pm
Kristy_loves_Keats PLATINUM, Arvada, Colorado
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this is GREAT! i have a feeling it could be pregnace or hiv something like that...great how you left us wanting more!

on Apr. 20 2010 at 8:59 pm
HeyAmanda SILVER, Rancho Cucamonga, California
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i think it was a pregnancy test? that is what i get the impression of

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on Apr. 20 2010 at 5:00 pm
Emmy13329 GOLD, Middletown, Delaware
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yea seriously if u thought it was bad you shouldn't have said anything or u could of gave her advice :(

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on Apr. 20 2010 at 4:58 pm
Emmy13329 GOLD, Middletown, Delaware
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I love it it's really good ,keep writting u truely have a talent :D:):P8)

on Apr. 20 2010 at 2:59 pm
MemorialMustangs GOLD, McAllen, Texas
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Well I know I'm not the author of it but while I was reading this I had thought that it was a pregnancy test

on Apr. 20 2010 at 2:58 pm
MemorialMustangs GOLD, McAllen, Texas
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Wow this was simply amazing! I honestly did love it!

on Apr. 20 2010 at 2:32 pm
AndTheVinesSpin GOLD, Romulus, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Love is the Movement" -TWLOHA
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This is amazing.

on Apr. 20 2010 at 10:18 am
fireeyedgirl SILVER, Dulles, Virginia
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It was a pregnancy test

on Apr. 20 2010 at 9:24 am
CanYouSeeTheCrazy PLATINUM, Cle Elum, Washington
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pregnancy. idk how i figured that out, i just kinda got the feeling... but i kno it was for pregnancy.

on Apr. 20 2010 at 5:52 am
IsobelFree DIAMOND, Hamilton, Other
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This is amazing! Very descriptive. Personally, I don't think it's a pregnancy test - people generally don't go to the doctor's to see if they're pregnant or not. Also, the doctor wouldn't say gravely, "You test was positive" - he'd be happier than that.

on Apr. 1 2010 at 10:13 pm
fictionlover10 SILVER, Scottsdale, Arizona
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This was a wonderful piece, very descriptive. Forigve me, though, but what was the test for?

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on Mar. 30 2010 at 1:11 pm
wolveseye GOLD, Tok, Alaska
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loved it! so discriptive.

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on Mar. 29 2010 at 7:26 pm
Katrselyn, Kankakee, Illinois
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Good Loved it.. What happened after? read mine! Kepp it up

on Mar. 29 2010 at 5:17 pm
thoughtfulsoul PLATINUM, El Cajon, California
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This is amazing!! I love how descriptive it is and left the reader to imply what was happening. to me that makes it more powerful when you don't need to come right out and say what is going on. very well written :)

on Mar. 29 2010 at 4:04 pm
GreenGirl13 SILVER, Groveland, Florida
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That was supprisingly mean. You should offer constructive critisism.

on Mar. 29 2010 at 8:56 am
bahbahbahrooooke. SILVER, Lumberton, Texas
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This was really good (: