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Life Behind The Color

February 11, 2012
By BraxtonLangstonChapman SILVER, Lexington, North Carolina
BraxtonLangstonChapman SILVER, Lexington, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Dedication, Hard Work


Every morning my mom would say, "if a white asks you to do something you do it." I reply, "yes ma'am." she hands me my lunch. I walked to school; it was about a mile down the street. I lived in a small town and I was the only colored person in school. I wasn't a racist, but I would retaliate on any colorless person that crossed me. I was an aggressive person I didn't mind what my mother told me every morning. If you got in my way you'd be moved and that was my motto. Everyday I cam into homeroom to see my desk in the back of the room the right corner to be exact. I was unable to see the board and everyone in front of me made sure I would never be able to either. Most of my kind in the situation I was in would have quit right then and there, but I didn't. I was a straight A student. It began to get to my classmates that I was excelling in everything I committed myself to. It got to one of my teachers heads so much that she would grade my papers incorrectly on purpose. I still kept an A in that class even with her errors. I guess she thought it was suppose to get to me well it never did. I was an honest African; no American that's right I doubt I'd be here if my people weren't brought here. So I just consider myself African. This is my embark to being a successful Afro-American. I will right down every thing I do and say from now until my death.


The author's comments:
This is a snippet of the new novel I've begun to write. I would love feed back because right now I'm in a total writers block. It takes place in North-Carolina in the 60's. It's about an African-American named Donald Lynch. He has some troubles with his race and his decisions with girls, and religion.

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on Mar. 8 2012 at 3:49 pm
BraxtonLangstonChapman SILVER, Lexington, North Carolina
9 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dedication, Hard Work

Oh this is just a summary, the book actually starts out in an argument with himself and his teacher. I really like your Idea the only problem I have now is really creating a friendly charactor for him. 

KelliB GOLD said...
on Mar. 8 2012 at 11:51 am
KelliB GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
15 articles 1 photo 55 comments

Favorite Quote:
Decide that you want it more than you are afraid of it.<br /> - Bill Cosby

I would agree with there being just a few grammatical eand tense rrors. Tense always get me too:) But other than that its a great idea and start. You can feel the a teeny bit of the aggressiveness of the main character with his "motto". I dont know where you plan on going with that aggressiveness but I would suggest, if you are planning on it being a big factor, you meld it into his character rather brashly and really emphasize it early on. Put in some kind of real confrontation and not just him telling the vague story of it. But its really good!

on Feb. 20 2012 at 6:36 pm
BraxtonLangstonChapman SILVER, Lexington, North Carolina
9 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dedication, Hard Work

Thank you, unknown

on Feb. 20 2012 at 6:36 pm
BraxtonLangstonChapman SILVER, Lexington, North Carolina
9 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dedication, Hard Work

I understand my writing issues my ideas and talent on sculpting an article is amazing. My editing skills not so much this is the first piece I actually have done with out the help of my 'English teacher"

on Feb. 20 2012 at 6:34 pm
BraxtonLangstonChapman SILVER, Lexington, North Carolina
9 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dedication, Hard Work

I know I also have a few mistakes, I was impatient. I couldn't wait for you because of your moving and issues.

on Feb. 19 2012 at 6:53 pm
DivingForRoses, Dickson, Tennessee
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I like the idea of the novel. It's a story with a lot of potential. In addition, you're a good writer. My criticisms are simply that you have a few sentence fragments, verb tense, and comma issues. For example, in the first sentence, you described your mother's actions in the past tense, but the next sentence was present tense. If this is being written as an account from the boy at a later date, which it appears to be, make sure the verb tenses are all correct. I'd suggest you allow your English teacher to read your work in his or her spare time and correct the simple grammatical issues that you might miss. Otherwise, I enjoyed reading this and look forward to more. Keep up the good work. :)

on Feb. 17 2012 at 1:43 pm
"Writer's Block" is normal Braxton...sometimes you just need to step away from the writing and then come back to it when you are rested and fresh. I like what you have started. Think about some of the situations you have been faced with here at school and continue. "Inject" the character you created with some of the same things you have seen and felt.

talversonnn said...
on Feb. 16 2012 at 6:42 pm
amazing,♥