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Do you love me?

June 24, 2010
By OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
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Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker<br /> We cannot change the cards we&#039;re dealt just how we play the hand<br /> Experience is what you get when you didn&#039;t get what you wanted<br /> It&#039;s pretty easy to be smart when you&#039;re parroting smart people<br /> -Randy Pausch

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“I love you.” he states over the phone, his rich angel’s voice hesitant and tender. He can make it sound like anything.

Oh, you love me now? You shouted at me, called me an idiot, a b****. That was love? When you left me waiting in that fancy dress that I’d bought all for you, at that expensive restaurant I’d had to spend a fortune in gas on to reach—left me waiting there pathetically all night while you cavorted around with some other woman. You call that love? I confronted you—you struck me. I can still feel the flash of pain across my face though it is days later. So this is your idea of love.

“Do you love me?” he whispers brokenly. Did he just ask me that? Did that son of a b**** just ask me that? After all he’s done, he has the nerve to ask me if I love him. I have the nerve to consider the question. My once-dreamy hazel eyes gaze through curling lashes at sights only I can see.

You, holding me in your strong, secure arms. Running your fingers through my dark, curly brown hair. Stroking my prominent, milky-white cheekbone. Whispering sweet secrets in my ear. Kissing my full red lips so gently and emotionally that my head swam for days. Do I love you?

“Yes,” I said dully. “Yes I do.” Wonderful. Did I really have to say that? Now he’ll think I’ve forgiven him.

“Will you give me another chance?” he asks, full of apprehension. Give him another chance? Another chance to carefully mend my heart, only to rip it to shreds? He must be joking.

But who am I fooling? I know the monster that beautiful exterior conceals. I know the infidelity, the lies, the cruelty. And I love him. I love him, I miss him, I want to be with him.

I’ve always prided myself on being a sensible girl. Intelligent, logical, always making the right choice. Right now, my heart and mind were grappling for the right to make this oh-so-important choice. They fought as viciously as a pair of wild dogs, but in the end, I proved myself correct. The mind won out. Self-preservation won out. Love lost.

“No,” I say curtly, and slam the phone down definitively, only to slowly slide down the wall until my head rests in my lap, salty drops splashing onto my crossed legs, sobs echoing throughout the desolate building. I made the right choice. I know I did. Then why does it hurt so much?

© Victoria W., Arcadia, CA

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I don't write a lot of short stories, but I love Taylor Swift songs, and one of my favorite ones inspired me. Guess which.
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OfficialApprover PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 9 2010 at 6:33 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1752 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker<br /> We cannot change the cards we&#039;re dealt just how we play the hand<br /> Experience is what you get when you didn&#039;t get what you wanted<br /> It&#039;s pretty easy to be smart when you&#039;re parroting smart people<br /> -Randy Pausch

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Thanks!  And I feel bad for her:(Luckily, I was not writing this from experience.  As mentioned in my comment, a Taylor Swift song/music video inspired me.
OfficialApprover PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 9 2010 at 6:32 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1752 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker<br /> We cannot change the cards we&#039;re dealt just how we play the hand<br /> Experience is what you get when you didn&#039;t get what you wanted<br /> It&#039;s pretty easy to be smart when you&#039;re parroting smart people<br /> -Randy Pausch

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Thank you so much!:)That was what I was aiming for.
aMANDA365 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 9 2010 at 1:41 pm
aMANDA365 BRONZE, Versailles, Indiana
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1.No one can make you feel inferior without your consent <br /> - Eleanor Roosevelt<br /> 2.I&#039;ll get there alive even if it kills me!<br /> - Homer Simpson<br /> 3.It&#039;s okay to be crazy, but don&#039;t be insane.<br /> - P Diddy

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Wow. thats really good!
laceywilson BRONZE said...
on Jul. 9 2010 at 12:03 pm
laceywilson BRONZE, Huntington, West Virginia
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What does not kill you makes you stronger. - Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

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wow that is a very well written post. this reminds me of a situation that my cousin was in.
Ellawind PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 9 2010 at 8:55 am
Ellawind PLATINUM, Seattle, Washington
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What doesn&#039;t kill you only makes you stronger.<br /> <br /> Don&#039;t let the fear of striking out keep you from playing the game.<br /> <br /> Dream like you will live forever, live like you will die today.

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That is AMAZING. It's an accurate, poignant portrayal of that sort of situation, and it's BEAUTIFully written. Love it!
OfficialApprover PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 6 2010 at 9:25 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1752 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker<br /> We cannot change the cards we&#039;re dealt just how we play the hand<br /> Experience is what you get when you didn&#039;t get what you wanted<br /> It&#039;s pretty easy to be smart when you&#039;re parroting smart people<br /> -Randy Pausch

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Thank you!  I just love that song, and I love that music video, and I started thinking of a story behind it, elaborating a bit, making it my own, trying to make it as emotional/angry as possible.  A lot of the dialogue and actions are similar to the phone conversation in the music video.
sweethearrrt GOLD said...
on Jul. 6 2010 at 9:16 pm
sweethearrrt GOLD, Portland, Oregon
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&quot;I&#039;m selfish, impatient and a little insecure. I make mistakes, I am out of control and at times hard to handle. But if you can&#039;t handle me at my worst, then you sure as hell don&#039;t deserve me at my best.&quot; <br /> &mdash; Marilyn Monroe

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ooohhh. that makes a ton of sense, too. i love the way it's written, and how there's so much emotion in every sentence.
OfficialApprover PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 6 2010 at 4:40 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1752 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker<br /> We cannot change the cards we&#039;re dealt just how we play the hand<br /> Experience is what you get when you didn&#039;t get what you wanted<br /> It&#039;s pretty easy to be smart when you&#039;re parroting smart people<br /> -Randy Pausch

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Thank you!  I was trying very hard to show how torn she was, wondering whether or not to take him back.  Glad to know I succeeded:)
DannyKid33 PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 6 2010 at 4:32 pm
DannyKid33 PLATINUM, Pleasant Hill, California
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&quot;Don&#039;t ever let the media tell you what to look like. You&#039;re beautiful the way you are. Stay beautiful, keep it ugly.&quot; - Gerard Way.

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wow tht was really good!! i could feel the emotion...and the pain. I know the struggle that she was going through and it really made you think. that was an excellent story...keep it up :)
OfficialApprover PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 6 2010 at 3:14 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1752 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker<br /> We cannot change the cards we&#039;re dealt just how we play the hand<br /> Experience is what you get when you didn&#039;t get what you wanted<br /> It&#039;s pretty easy to be smart when you&#039;re parroting smart people<br /> -Randy Pausch

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I suppose that would work, but I was actually inspired by the music video for "White Horse".
OfficialApprover PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 6 2010 at 3:14 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1752 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker<br /> We cannot change the cards we&#039;re dealt just how we play the hand<br /> Experience is what you get when you didn&#039;t get what you wanted<br /> It&#039;s pretty easy to be smart when you&#039;re parroting smart people<br /> -Randy Pausch

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Thanks!  I tried to make this an emotional/angry piece.
sweethearrrt GOLD said...
on Jul. 6 2010 at 2:21 pm
sweethearrrt GOLD, Portland, Oregon
10 articles 7 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;I&#039;m selfish, impatient and a little insecure. I make mistakes, I am out of control and at times hard to handle. But if you can&#039;t handle me at my worst, then you sure as hell don&#039;t deserve me at my best.&quot; <br /> &mdash; Marilyn Monroe

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hmmm was the song "you're not sorry"??
RFrocker23 PLATINUM said...
on Jul. 6 2010 at 2:18 pm
RFrocker23 PLATINUM, Ballwin, Missouri
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&quot;Don&#039;t cry because it&#039;s over, smile because it happened.&quot;

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This is great! I really understood the emotions you were trying to convey. I also really liked all the similes and metaphors you used throughout it.