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The Perfect Girl.

September 19, 2009
By AwesomeAley GOLD, Levittown, Pennsylvania
AwesomeAley GOLD, Levittown, Pennsylvania
15 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Forget about yesturday it doesn't matter, Live for today as tho life doesn't matter, Wish for a tommorow as good as today and hopefully it will be better" -aley (me)


There once was a sweet innocent perfect girl. This perfect girl had the perfect life. She had the perfect boyfriend and the perfect best friend. The perfect parents and the perfect grades. Her life was perfect until she discovered what truly happens beyond your mirror. You think your mirror is just a reflection right? Well, your wrong. Your mirror is a portal to a completely different world it’s the same world as ours but the only difference is every person in you’re your so mirror looks just like you but has a completely different personality like if your shy its confident and vise versa. But if you were to switch places with double then problems start because it is your opposite so it has different friends with the same faces as yours but different personalities. Everyone notices and things happen. But first let me tell you about Alexandra Nicole Dunlap the girl with the perfect life.


5:30 Beep. Beep. Beep. Beep. Beep. Beep. Sounded the alarm clock making Aley wake up for school. “Time to wake sleeping beauty” called my dad as he opened my door a crack “I’m up dad” “just making sure” he said as he closed the door again and walked back to his bed to sleep for another hour or so. Aley got up and brushed her hair and teeth then went towards her closet. “What should I wear today” she said to herself as she looked through the hangers at her various outfits from Abercrombie & Finch, Hollister, Abercrombie, etc. and finally picked out a pink plaid skirt with a white shirt, black vest and matching skinny tie. And as usual she looked perfect just like her life. At School she met up with her boyfriend Kevin Nelms “Hey A.n.d.” that was the one flaw in her life her initials were and she hated it when people called her it. “You know I hate that nickname kevie” he rolled his eyes she came up with that cause he kept calling her and. Then the first bell rang.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~School~Day~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

After a perfect day at school yet again with her perfect grades she came home to her perfect parents and began to get ready for the football game tonight of course she was head cheerleader and of course he boyfriend was the star quarterback. She put on her tight red and blue top with the matching even tighter skirt. And headed to the game in witch for good luck gave her boyfriend a kiss for which he didn’t mind and won the game 24-0. After going home discovered what at first she thought was wonderful.

Why can’t my life be at least a little un-perfect? She said as she looked in the mirror. “Because my life sucks” her reflection said. She stared at her reflection as though she must be crazy. “What are you looking at?” her reflection said again. “How are you talking to me your just a reflection” she said, “well you started talking to me first” he reflection countered. “True but I didn’t think mirrors could talk” “well I answer your question so maybe I should just go” her reflection started to walk away even thought she didn’t even move a mussel. “Wait, why does your life suck?” “Because yours is perfect are worlds are parallel if my world sucks yours is perfect, and vise versa.” “I feel bad for you” Aley said. “well I know how you can fix things without ruining your life..” said her reflection “come closer” Aley leaned towards the mirror and her Reflection pulled her in and came through to are world and as Aley banged on the mirror she couldn’t get through “enjoy your new life” her now her reflection said.

The author's comments:
i came up with this after reading about a disease that makes people talk to them selves through mirrors so i thought it would be cool if the mirror took you.

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on Jun. 23 2012 at 9:44 pm
AwesomeAley GOLD, Levittown, Pennsylvania
15 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Forget about yesturday it doesn't matter, Live for today as tho life doesn't matter, Wish for a tommorow as good as today and hopefully it will be better" -aley (me)

I actually went back and revised this story, it's now called Mirrors don't lie

on Apr. 11 2012 at 8:55 am
AbbyMarie SILVER, Harlingen, Texas
6 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Our greatest glory is not in never failing, but in rising up every time we fail". Ralph Waldo Emerson

The idea for the story was fabulous. It was very interesting and new. I've never read something like this before. However, it would be better if you would go back and revise. Make sure everything is spelled right and all. Also maybe bigger words? All in all I really liked the story line. You should expand, because I would for sure read it!

on Jan. 14 2012 at 4:19 pm
summerchikk14 SILVER, Redding, Connecticut
5 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I've my heart where my head should be, and light up the rest of me. Cuz in dreams, it don't fall apart, through the stars it starts when your life is a work of art<3"

its confsuing because of the grammar and such, but an interesting plot.

on Dec. 28 2011 at 5:07 pm
Cheshirekat SILVER, Boise, Idaho
5 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
&ldquo;A friend might well be reckoned the masterpiece of nature.&rdquo; - Ralph Waldo Emerson<br /> &quot;Oh you can&#039;t avoid that; we&#039;re all mad here.&quot; - The Cheshire Cat

Finish please!

on Oct. 18 2011 at 1:33 pm
RachaelSt BRONZE, Phoenix, Arizona
2 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
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VEDDY NICE!

on Aug. 13 2011 at 4:44 pm
emilybwrites SILVER, Villa Hills, Kentucky
5 articles 0 photos 112 comments

Favorite Quote:
last night i lay in bed, looking up at the stars and i thought to myself, where the heck is the ceiling?

i thought this was pretty good! can u check out my poem "Forgotten Domain" and some of my other work and please comment/rate it!!!!

tWhirl BRONZE said...
on Apr. 25 2011 at 2:40 pm
tWhirl BRONZE, Basking Ridge, New Jersey
4 articles 7 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
&quot;You&#039;ll need to know how the story ends, so you&#039;ll sit around, even though you should just go.&quot; - Forty Days (Streetlight Manifesto)

You have a very interesting idea but I feel like you either rushed writing it or had a hard time trying to portray it in words.

It would be nice if you could explain the parallel worlds a little more and expand on the story. The person-mirror dialogue could be expanded a bit too.

But, it's really good idea and you have the right start :)


PJD17 SILVER said...
on Mar. 24 2011 at 4:08 pm
PJD17 SILVER, Belleville, Illinois
8 articles 0 photos 624 comments

Favorite Quote:
I do the best imatation of myself- Ben Folds

Great story gkeep it up  could you please take a look at and comment on my story Manso's Shame  i would really appreciate it

on Nov. 22 2010 at 9:04 am
pnkninja11 BRONZE, Partlow, Virginia
2 articles 0 photos 27 comments
This story is very interesting. Near the ending was the most appealing to me. I can't really relate to this but I think most people don't have perfect lives. They mess up once in awhile but they eventually learn frorm their mistakes.

on Nov. 7 2010 at 12:58 pm
xXYourxRainXx BRONZE, Moyock, North Carolina
1 article 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Don&#039;t be afraid of shadows, it only means there&#039;s a light nearby&quot; -Amy lee

Really good plot idea, I liked the story, however, you could have fleashed it out a bit...all in all pretty good:) Keep it up!

ILIKePIEZ said...
on Oct. 31 2010 at 2:45 pm
to tell you the truth this one was the first one that didn't bore me to death i kinda enjoyed it but it needs work but only a little its a good storyline though. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!!

bluespark13 said...
on Aug. 4 2010 at 11:52 am
COOL STORY!!!

on Jun. 28 2010 at 11:11 pm
roxymutt BRONZE, Marietta, Georgia
4 articles 5 photos 109 comments

Favorite Quote:
It&#039;s not what you look at that matters, it&#039;s what you see. -David Henry Thoreau

i liked the story but it seemed almost a bit rushed...u might have wanted to draw out the conversation of the mirror twins more...described the world in the mirror compared to the world in real life...not necissarily that it was the opposite but give examples about how it was opposite..good piece tho

amae10 BRONZE said...
on Jun. 21 2010 at 1:28 pm
amae10 BRONZE, Glennville, Georgia
1 article 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
If nothing goes right, go left.

I agree completely! Good story and has good elements, but the intro needs someeee work! My opinion also, but it's hard to understand and doesn't flow at all.

_Mags_ SILVER said...
on Jun. 21 2010 at 8:28 am
_Mags_ SILVER, Somewhere, North Carolina
9 articles 7 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
- I stare danger in the face and giggle<br /> - Never argue with an idiot, people might not know the difference<br /> -R.A.P (Retards Attempting Poetry)<br /> -Tip Cologne ryhmes with alone

instresting, compared to her i',not crazy at all, i liked it. Can you read some of my stuff?

on May. 10 2010 at 12:32 pm
Ninten1992 PLATINUM, New York, New York
27 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Forgive and Forget&quot;.

This is great!

zobean GOLD said...
on Jan. 18 2010 at 4:07 pm
zobean GOLD, Northfield, Massachusetts
16 articles 1 photo 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;A Good player inspires themselves. A GREAT player inspires others.&quot;

This is a good story but i think the intro needs to be worked on a little bit. That of course is just my opinion.

on Nov. 9 2009 at 4:19 pm
AwesomeAley GOLD, Levittown, Pennsylvania
15 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;Forget about yesturday it doesn&#039;t matter, Live for today as tho life doesn&#039;t matter, Wish for a tommorow as good as today and hopefully it will be better&quot; -aley (me)

alley awsome stor loved it and my life is not that perfect like that well i gtg bye

williamsn said...
on Nov. 1 2009 at 4:55 pm
This story was remarkably enjoyable, to me mostly because I can guess that all girls wish to have a life like that, and you are showing them that it may not be all that it is cut out to be. From, "Your mirror is a portal..." to, "..as yours but different personalities." made me wonder what my counterpart would be like. Would he be shy? Would he be outgoing? I do not know, and probably never will but I will think about it. Another part that I liked was the entire last paragraph, from, "Why can't my life be..." to, "...her now her reflection said." That paragraph also made me think about what my life would be like if everything was switched around. This was one of the better stories I have read on here and I hope to read more of your pieces someday.

williamsn said...
on Nov. 1 2009 at 4:53 pm
This story was remarkably enjoyable, to me mostly because I can guess that all girls wish to have a life like that, and you are showing them that it may not be all that it is cut out to be. From, "Your mirror is a portal..." to, "..as yours but different personalities." made me wonder what my counterpart would be like. Would he be shy? Would he be outgoing? I do not know, and probably never will but I will think about it. Another part that I liked was the entire last paragraph, from, "Why can't my life be..." to, "...her now her reflection said." That paragraph also made me tink about what my life would be like if everything was switched around. This was one of the better stories I have read on here and I hope to read more of your pieces someday.